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The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples. v.1

The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. Give your opinion with examples. v. 1
Traffic congestion has become a global problem that jeopardizes human activities and affects the environment adversely. Some people argue that the best way to solve this issue is to provide free public transport. I believe that such a move will address the problem to a certain extent; however, it will not resolve it completely. In my opinion, a better solution is to build better and wider roads. Firstly, providing public transport at no cost will encourage more number of people to use it. According to a survey conducted by “The Hindu”, nearly 46% of commuters readily agreed to utilize such a facility, owing to the fact that they can save a lot, in terms of money and fuel. Obviously, a free transport network will have a large number of users. Nevertheless, there are some downsides to it. The foremost point of concern is that it will cost the government a great deal of money and thus burden the common man with heavy taxes. Taxes are not the only problem, though. Another point to consider is the peak hour traffic during which public transport is a very inconvenient option. Most offices provide free pick up and drop facilities for their employees to make their peak hour commute more comfortable. These people will certainly not want to use the public transport. What’s more, people living a life of luxury and comfort will want to travel by their own mode of transport at a time convenient to them. Thus it is evident that the idea of a no cost travel will not appeal to everyone. In conclusion, providing free transport in cities will ease traffic congestion to a great extent. However, it is not a foolproof solution. if the government is looking for a lasting solution, it has to build better roads.
Traffic congestion has become a global problem that jeopardizes human activities and affects the environment
adversely
.
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argue that the best way to solve this issue is to provide
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free
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public
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transport
. I believe that such a
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will address the problem to a certain extent;
however
, it will not resolve it completely. In my opinion, a better solution is to build better and wider roads.

Firstly
, providing
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public
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transport
at no cost will encourage more number of
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people
to
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use
it. According to a survey conducted by “The Hindu”,
nearly
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agreed
to utilize such a facility, owing to the fact that they can save a lot, in terms of money and fuel.
Obviously
, a
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free
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transport
network will have
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a large number of
users.

Nevertheless
, there are
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downsides to it. The foremost point of concern is that it will cost the
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government
a great deal of money and
thus
burden the common
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man
with heavy taxes. Taxes are not the
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only
problem, though. Another point to consider is the peak hour traffic during which
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public
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transport
is a
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inconvenient option. Most offices provide
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free
pick up and drop facilities for their employees to
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make
their peak hour commute more comfortable. These
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people
will
certainly
not want to
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use
the
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public
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transport
. What’s more,
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people
living a life of luxury and comfort will want to travel by their
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own
mode of
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transport
at a time convenient to them.
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Thus
it is evident that the
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idea
of a no cost travel will not appeal to everyone.

In conclusion
, providing
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free
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transport
in cities will
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ease
traffic congestion to a great extent.
However
, it is not a foolproof solution.
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if
the
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government
is looking for a lasting solution, it
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has to
build better roads.
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IELTS essay The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. Give your opinion with examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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