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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 3
Smoking is injurious to health. We come across this statement very often like on a television a person is smoking or on a cigarette packet. As a result of this warning, much wise government has banned smoking in public areas. This essay will discuss why smoking is bad for public health and also dangerous in some places. Firstly, not many people are comfortable with the smoke produced by cigarettes. A cloud of cigarette smoke is very harmful to our body and if consumed very frequently it will affect our lungs. So there should be a special smoking zone where people can smoke and other people remain unaffected by the polluted air. Especially near the school area, kids will not be aware of the dangerous air produced from the cigarettes. So it should not be allowed near the kid's area and people who want to smoke should make a move to a proper smoking area. It will also protect kids from the smoking habit. Secondly, if there is not proper smoking zone and people can smoke wherever they wish it might lead to some fatal accidents. Like near the petrol station if somebody is smoking and leave the lightened cigarette over there only it might result in a bad fire taking many lives at stake. So smoking should not be in public and a dedicated zone should be given to the smokers. In conclusion, it is a very good decision from the government to ban smoke in public places and keep the environment a healthy and safe place to live in. Also, it is advisable for the people who want to smoke to enter the special smoking zone and not affect public health.
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is injurious to health. We
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across this statement
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like on a television a person is
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smoking
or on a
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packet.
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of this warning, much wise
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government
has banned
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smoking
in
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public
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areas
. This essay will discuss why
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smoking
is
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for
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public
health and
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dangerous
in
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some
places.

Firstly
, not
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many
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people
are comfortable with the
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smoke
produced by
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cigarettes
. A cloud of
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cigarette
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smoke
is
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very
harmful to our body and if consumed
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very
frequently
it will affect our lungs.
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there should be a special
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smoking
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zone
where
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people
can
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smoke
and other
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people
remain unaffected by the polluted air.
Especially
near the school
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area
, kids will not be aware of the
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dangerous
air produced from the
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cigarettes
.
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it should not be
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allowed
near the kid's
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should
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smoking
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area
. It will
also
protect kids from the
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habit.

Secondly
, if there is not proper
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smoking
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zone
and
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people
can
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wherever they wish it might lead to
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fatal accidents. Like near the petrol station if somebody is
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smoking
and
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leave
the lightened
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over there
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only
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public
and a dedicated
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given
to the smokers.

In conclusion
, it is a
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decision from the
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to ban
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smoke
in
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public
places and
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keep
the environment a healthy and safe place to
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live
in.
Also
, it is advisable for the
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people
who want to
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smoke
to enter the special
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smoking
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zone
and not affect
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public
health.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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