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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.7

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. 7
Taking a break from the tedious work schedule is imperative for every one of us. There are a group of people who think activities like reading and solving puzzles increase the brain activeness; whereas others opine that recharging the brain by taking a rest is a better option. I would agree with the previous statement, although both these viewpoints shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, people have the viewpoint that playing games like Sudoku crosswords are essential to rejuvenate the mind. Perhaps our mind can never be in a state of rest; therefore, we need to trigger our brain to keep it healthy and activated even on holidays. To illustrate, a recent UK government report showed that a large population of people who spend time playing mind games feel more energetic and recharged. As a result, their performance increases manifolds and delivers the projects much before the deadlines. On the other hand, another group of people believe it is crucial to give the brain a total rest by just lazing around during their relaxation period. Firstly, the mind, body and soul need complete relaxation to rejuvenate. Secondly, it has been seen that people prefer going entirely off work for a few days, which helps them to be recharged; and later they come back with a pragmatic approach to face everyday challenges. For instance, its often seen that famous actors take a sure break before working on a specific character for a particular movie; hence, they give a power-packed performance. To conclude, a person can be recharged both by playing brain games during a holiday or completely taking a break from everything and resting the mind, body and soul.
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activeness; whereas others opine that recharging the
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by taking a rest is a better option. I would
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with the previous statement, although both these viewpoints shall
be discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand,
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people
have the viewpoint that playing games like Sudoku crosswords are essential to rejuvenate the
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mind
. Perhaps our
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mind
can never be in a state of rest;
therefore
, we need to trigger our
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brain
to
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keep
it healthy and activated even on holidays. To illustrate, a recent UK
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government
report
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showed
that a large population of
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people
who spend time playing
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mind
games feel more energetic and recharged.
As a result
, their performance increases manifolds and delivers the projects much
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before
the deadlines.

On the other hand
, another group of
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people
believe it is crucial to give the
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brain
a total rest by
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just
lazing around during their relaxation period.
Firstly
, the
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mind
, body and soul need complete relaxation to rejuvenate.
Secondly
, it has been
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seen
that
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people
prefer going
entirely
off work for a few days, which
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helps
them to
be recharged
; and later they
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come
back with a pragmatic approach to face everyday challenges.
For instance
, its
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often
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seen
that
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famous
actors take a sure break
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before
working on a specific character for a particular movie;
hence
, they give a power-packed performance.

To conclude
, a person can
be recharged
both by playing
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brain
games during a holiday or completely taking a break from everything and resting the
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mind
, body and soul.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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