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The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to 6 years of free education to children so that they can at least read write and use numbers To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement v.2

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to 6 years of free education to children so that they can at least read write and use numbers with the statement v. 2
It is the unrefutable way that we can reduce the poor category people by providing free education for the 6 years. But there are some counterparts strongly agreeing by a sectioned of people who not only will help to provide free education for some amount of years. I am of the opinion who will be debated before going to the conclusion. First and foremost, there are unendurable populations for some of the developing countries where they are affecting a lot to get the basic needs such as food, education, and health. International health organization has released the survey for last year that overall 64 % people are under in below poverty and 34 % of children are not getting an education due to this unavailable money for education. If they get 6 years of free education, it will really help them to have a social knowledge and they will get some confidence to overcome their life. On the other hand, free education only for 6 years that not sufficient which my concern. The government will take the responsibilities to categorize all the people and who are all in below poverty and which they unable to take care of their children those all have to get free education up to they complete their higher studies and also they can provide free lunch so that pupil will become healthier and they can able to study as well. For instance, In India, one of state government who gave free education and free lunch. In order to that children, education has raised consecutively. Now that state became the first for the more educated people state. To recapitulate this, a fee education is promoting children physical, intellectual and emotional. Also, they need more benefits from the government to achieve their life.
It is the
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unrefutable
way that we can
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reduce
the poor category
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people
by providing
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free
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education
for the 6 years.
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But
there are
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some
counterparts
strongly
agreeing by
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a sectioned of
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people
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who
not
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only
will
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help
to provide
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free
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education
for
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some
amount of years. I am of the opinion
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who
will
be debated
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before
going to the conclusion.

First
and foremost, there are unendurable populations for
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some of the
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developing countries
where they are affecting a lot to
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get
the basic needs such as food,
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education
, and health. International health organization has released the survey for last
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year
that
overall
64 %
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people
are under in below poverty and 34 % of
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children
are not getting an
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education
due to this unavailable money for
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education
. If they
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get
6 years of
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free
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education
, it will
really
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help
them to have a social
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knowledge and
they will
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get
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some
confidence to overcome their life.

On the other hand
,
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free
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education
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only
for 6 years that not sufficient which my concern. The
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government
will take the responsibilities to categorize all the
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people
and
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who
are all in below poverty and which
Did you mean "they are" or "they were"?
they
unable to take care of their
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children
those all
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have to
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get
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free
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education
up to they complete their higher studies and
also
they can provide
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free
lunch
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so
that pupil will become
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
healthier and
they
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can able to
study
as well
.
For instance
, In India, one of state
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government
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who
gave
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free
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education
and
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free
lunch. In order to that
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children
,
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education
has raised
consecutively
.
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Now
that state became the
first
for the more educated
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people
state.

To recapitulate this, a fee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is promoting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
physical, intellectual and emotional.
Also
, they need more benefits from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to achieve their life.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to 6 years of free education to children so that they can at least read write and use numbers with the statement v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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