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Some people believe that robots are important for the future human development. While others say that they are dangerous and put negative impact on society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that robots are important for the future human development. While others say that they are dangerous and put negative impact on society. v. 2
This is an era of science and technology, an artificial intelligence makes the human life full of comfortable. Majority of folks reckon that automatic machines are more valuable for the future development. Whereas, the rest of commoners realize that robots are harmful and put detrimental impact on the country. Personally, I believe that automatic machines put more adverse effect on individual' s life in many ways. Why most persons opine that robots are crucial for the future development. The first key fact probably be that, if owner of the company install artifical intelligence then they would uplift the productivity as well as profit of the company. Because, it is single type investment and company will have no need to give salary to robots and they can work round a clock without any coffee or lunch break, salary and sick leave. Another chief point might be that, robots would finish any task before the deadline of that task which is not possible for human' s being in some critical circumstances. So, intelligence devices are important for future development. Robots would perform each and every task in better way. That is why, the chances of the mistake may lesser than that work which is done by citizens. Nevertheless, how artificial intelligence can put negative impact on human' s life in order to justify latter view. First and foremost, if robots are worked in work place then citizens of the nation would confront unemployment which may rise crimes in the society. Additional, people would more rely on such technology which makes the sedentary lifestyle of the individuals. Consequently, people may become lazy and lethargic and may suffer from several diseases such as headache, joint pain and obesity. In gist, it can be confidently conveyed that, it is undeniable that automatic machines would increase the profit of the company and makes the human life luxurious. But, it can not be avoided that it would also put detrimental impact on individual' s life.
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intelligence
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makes
the
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human
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life
full of comfortable. Majority of folks reckon that automatic machines are more valuable for the future development. Whereas, the rest of commoners realize that robots are harmful and
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put
detrimental impact on the country.
Personally
, I believe that automatic machines
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put
more adverse effect on
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individual&
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life
in
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many
ways.

Why most persons opine that robots are crucial for the future development. The
first
key fact
probably
be that, if owner of the
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company
install
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artifical
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intelligence
then they would uplift the productivity
as well
as profit of the
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company
.
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Because
, it is single type investment and
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company
will have no need to give salary to
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robots and
they can work round a clock without any coffee or lunch break, salary and sick
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leave
.

Another chief point might be that, robots would finish any task
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before
the deadline of that task which is not possible for
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human&
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some
critical circumstances.
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So
,
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intelligence
devices are
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important
for future development. Robots would perform each and every task in better way.
That is
why, the chances of the mistake may lesser than that work which
is done
by citizens.

Nevertheless
, how artificial
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intelligence
can
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put
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negative
impact on
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human&
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life
in order to justify latter view.
First
and foremost, if robots
are worked
in work place then citizens of the nation would confront unemployment which may rise crimes in the society. Additional,
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people
would more rely on such technology which
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makes
the sedentary lifestyle of the individuals.
Consequently
,
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people
may become lazy and lethargic and may suffer from several

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diseases
such as headache, joint pain and obesity.

In gist, it can be
confidently
conveyed that, it is undeniable that automatic machines would increase the profit of the
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company
and
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makes
the
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human
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life
luxurious.
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But
, it can not
be avoided
that it would
also
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put
detrimental impact on
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life
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that robots are important for the future human development. While others say that they are dangerous and put negative impact on society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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