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Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.1

Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. v. 1
Crime rates are at an all-time high in recent times. While many people consider longer prison sentences as the way to go, others perceive that other methods of punishment can give better causal outcomes. This essay will discuss the importance of jail time and explore other potential alternatives along with my personal belief that the punishment should meet the intensity of the crime. Certainly, serving prison time is very crucial to reflect the graveness of the crime. Prison allows the offenders to repent and ponder about the impact of their crime by indulging in psychotherapy, manual labor, and menial jobs. In fact, sentencing criminals who have committed dreadful actions for an extended period seems like an appropriate justice of law enforcement. This will refrain them from committing further crimes and protect people from such individuals. Serial killers, for instance, who are sociopaths, must be given a life long imprisonment for their actions. For this reason, giving long sentences can reduce crime rates, and I believe that brutal and violent criminals should be placed in jails. Nonetheless, imprisonment is just one of the methods of punishment. On the other hand, alternative tactics can be employed to reform criminals. Instead of long sentences, encouraging charity work, detention, and fines can reduce the criminal mentality amongst mild offenders. More often, enforcing children from juvenile homes to volunteer at a soup kitchen and a shelter home can remodel their personalities and suppress their criminal instincts. Evidently, these methods of punishment have shown to help minor offenders refrain from redoing crimes. Therefore, I support such methods for minor crimes. In conclusion, people debate about the right form of punishment, either longer sentencing or other methods of reinforcement, for the benefit of crime reduction. Though both are appropriate, in my opinion, the propensity of the crime should decide the nature of the punishment.
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many
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people
consider longer prison sentences as the way to go, others perceive that
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other
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methods
of
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punishment
can give better causal outcomes. This essay will discuss the importance of jail time and explore
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other
potential alternatives along with my personal belief that the
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punishment
should
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meet
the intensity of the crime.

Certainly
, serving prison time is
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very
crucial to reflect the graveness of the
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crime
. Prison
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allows
the offenders to repent and ponder about the impact of their
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crime
by indulging in psychotherapy, manual labor, and menial jobs. In fact, sentencing
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criminals
who have committed dreadful actions for an extended period seems like an appropriate justice of law enforcement. This will refrain them from committing
further
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crimes
and protect
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people
from such individuals. Serial killers,
for instance
, who are sociopaths,
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must
be
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given
a life long imprisonment for their actions.
For this reason
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reduce
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crime
rates, and I believe that brutal and violent
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criminals
should
be placed
in jails. Nonetheless, imprisonment is
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just
one of the
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methods
of punishment.

On the
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other
hand, alternative tactics can
be employed
to reform
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criminals
.
Instead
of long sentences, encouraging charity work, detention, and fines can
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reduce
the
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criminal
mentality amongst mild offenders. More
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often
, enforcing children from juvenile homes to volunteer at a soup kitchen and a shelter home can remodel their personalities and suppress their
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criminal
instincts.
Evidently
, these
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methods
of
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punishment
have shown to
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help
minor offenders refrain from redoing
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crimes
.
Therefore
, I support such
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methods
for minor crimes.

In conclusion
,
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people
debate about the right form of
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punishment
, either longer sentencing or
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other
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methods
of reinforcement, for the benefit of
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crime
reduction. Though both are appropriate, in my opinion, the propensity of the
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crime
should decide the nature of the
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punishment
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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