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The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is by encouraging people to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is by encouraging people to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. with this opinion? v. 1
Traffic jams have become an increasingly acute problem for certain geographical areas. Some people claim that the most effective method to combat the problem is to encourage individuals to move to cities from suburbs and countrysides. This essay will argue reasons as to why urbanization is not the best way to go about, even though there are some benefits to it. Settling down in cities of residents of countrysides will significantly decrease the number of personal transport on the roads. That is because people who had to commute big distances in order to get to their workplaces will no longer have to do that. Living in a big city gives the opportunity to find a job of interest nearby person’s home. This makes taking a short walk to work rather than using transport possible, which leads to a smaller number of drivers on highways. This instance has bolstered existing opinion that moving to cities will solve the problem of transportation and traffic. Despite possible benefits associated with urbanization, the idea that this is the best way to solve challenges related to traffic is completely preposterous. Resettlement of people could lead to increased amounts of citizens, which, in turn, anyway will increase traffic on the roads. In addition, the number of people who do not own personal transport might grow and the government will have to take care of this as well. Overall, the idea that mass relocation to urban areas will solve transportation and traffic problems is ill-informed and could potentially lead to a far worse outcome. This essay argued that urbanization is not the best way to solve the problem. In my opinion, significant drawbacks of mass moving from rural to urban areas do not allow this method to be called the best.
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Traffic
jams have become an
increasingly
acute
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problem
for certain geographical areas.
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Some
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people
claim that the most effective method to combat the
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problem
is to encourage individuals to
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move
to
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cities
from suburbs and countrysides. This essay will argue reasons as to why urbanization is not the
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best
way to go about,
even though
there are
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some
benefits to it.

Settling down in
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cities
of residents of countrysides will
significantly
decrease the number of personal transport on the roads.
That is
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because
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people
who had to commute
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big
distances in order to
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get
to their workplaces will no longer
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have to
do that. Living in a
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big
city gives the opportunity to find a job of interest nearby person’s home. This
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makes
taking a short walk to work
rather
than using transport possible, which leads to a smaller number of drivers on highways. This instance has bolstered existing opinion that moving to
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cities
will
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solve
the
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problem
of transportation and traffic.

Despite possible benefits associated with urbanization, the
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idea
that this is the
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best
way to
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solve
challenges related to
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traffic
is completely preposterous. Resettlement of
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people
could lead to increased amounts of citizens, which, in turn, anyway will increase
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traffic
on the roads.
In addition
, the number of
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people
who do not
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own
personal transport might grow and the
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government
will
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have to
take care of this
as well
.
Overall
, the
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idea
that mass relocation to urban areas will
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solve
transportation and
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traffic
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problems
is ill-informed and could
potentially
lead to a far worse outcome.

This essay argued that urbanization is not the
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best
way to
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solve
the
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problem
. In my opinion, significant drawbacks of mass moving from rural to urban areas do not
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allow
this method to
be called
the
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best
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is by encouraging people to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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