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The bar graph shows net national income (that's the income earned by the various factors of production in the economy, after the loss of used-up capital equipment has been accounted for) in per capita terms. v.1

The bar graph shows net national income (that's the income earned by the various factors of production in the economy, after the loss of used-up capital equipment has been accounted for) in per capita terms. v. 1
Using the Internet has become a normal part of everyday life for many people. They use it to book airline tickets, or to access news about world events, or to follow the fortunes of their favourite football club. Millions of people across the world belong to social networking groups where they keep in touch with their friends and if they live away from them, their family. In my opinion, these are all good ways to use the Internet. When it comes to finding out information there are some very good sites where it is possible to check, for example, someone's biographical details or statistics about global warming. However, information from the Internet should be used with caution, because although there are many reliable sites, such as academic journals and well-known newspapers, there are also unreliable ones, so it is important to check where the material originates from before using it. Some students use websites which offer ready-made assignments. This is not a good idea, even if you ignore the fact that it is cheating, because such websites may contain factual errors or biased views. In a recent case, a student found herself in serious trouble when she submitted an essay from one of these sites only to discover that it was about Austria, not Australia, but had an error in the title. Nevertheless, it is nowadays possible for people all over the world to study or do business on an equal footing, in a way that was unimaginable only a few years ago. On the whole I believe that the Internet is an excellent way both to communicate and to find information, as long as it is used intelligently.
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people
. They
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use
it to book airline tickets, or to access news about world
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events
, or to follow the fortunes of their
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favourite
football club. Millions of
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people
across the world belong to social networking groups where they
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keep
in touch with their friends and if they
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live
away from them, their family. In my opinion, these are all
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good
ways to
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use
the Internet.

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comes
to finding out information there are
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some
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very
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good
sites where it is possible to
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check
,
for example
, someone's biographical
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details
or statistics about global warming.
However
, information from the Internet should be
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used
with caution,
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because
although there are
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many
reliable sites, such as academic journals and well-known newspapers, there are
also
unreliable ones,
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it is
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where the material originates from
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before
using it.

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Some
students
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use
websites which offer ready-made assignments. This is not a
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good
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idea
, even if you
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ignore
the fact that it is cheating,
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because
such websites may contain factual errors or biased views. In a recent case, a student found herself in serious trouble when she submitted an essay from one of these sites
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only
to discover that it was about Austria, not Australia,
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but
had an error in the title.

Nevertheless
, it is nowadays possible for
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people
all over the world to study or do business on an equal footing, in a way that was unimaginable
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only
a few years ago.
On the whole
I believe that the Internet is an excellent way both to communicate and to find information, as long as it is
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used
intelligently
.
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IELTS essay The bar graph shows net national income (that's the income earned by the various factors of production in the economy, after the loss of used-up capital equipment has been accounted for) in per capita terms. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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