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You recently bought a new piece of equipment for your home but it did not work. You phoned the store but still, no action has been taken. Write a letter to the store manager-describe what equipment you bought-explain the problem with new equipment-say wha v.1

You recently bought a new piece of equipment for your home but it did not work. You phoned the store but still, no action has been taken. Write a letter to the store manager-describe what equipment you bought-explain the problem with new equipment-say wha v. 1
It is believed by some that having friends who share the same thought as you is more important than a friend who has a differing opinion. In my opinion, I believe that having companions with an opposing view is better. On the one hand, some people believe that friendship with individuals that share same common view is better because there will be no room for commotion or conflict between the two parties. In other words, these two sets of people will be able to agree on ideas easily, without ending at loggerheads. What's more, theses sets of friends will make problem solving less difficult as they would be able to arrive at a common conclusion. For example, five groups of friends were interviewed by the psychology department of the University of California, they were asked the secret of the harmony amongst them despite being from different tribes, they all commented that it was easier because they all shared common view. This emphasizes the importance of sharing similar opinions. On the other hand, others think that having friends who disagree with one's view is better and I agree, because this allows one the opportunity to make a more concrete decision. To put in another way, when an individual has companions that do not agree with his judgement, it gives the friend wider options to choose from, consequently, resulting in more solid conclusions being made on various matters. Furthermore, this person can rely on his friends with different opinions because even if his own decision is not right, his friends can bring more solid views to the table that would in the end solve the problems. A good example of this was when a popular actor Adam Sadler gave a congratulatory speech after winning the award of the best actor in the world. He attributed his success to his friends who kept pushing him to the peak, despite having failed to perform excellently in the last movie he released. If Mr Sadler did not have friends with different views about his performance than what he felt about himself, he would have ended up a failure. In conclusion, although people's viewpoints may vary, I believe that having friends with different ideas will yield a better result than friends with the same ideas.
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important
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friend
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who
has a differing opinion. In my opinion, I believe that
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having
companions with an opposing
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view
is better.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
believe that friendship with individuals that share same common
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view
is better
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because
there will be no room for commotion or conflict between the two parties.
In other words
, these two sets of
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people
will be able to
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agree
on
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ideas
easily
, without ending at loggerheads. What's more,
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sets of
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friends
will
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make
problem solving less difficult as they would be able to arrive at a common conclusion.
For example
, five groups of
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friends
were interviewed
by the psychology department of the University of California, they
were asked
the secret of the harmony amongst them despite being from
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different
tribes, they all commented that it was easier
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because
they all shared common
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view
. This emphasizes the importance of sharing similar opinions.

On the other hand
, others
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think
that
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having
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friends
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who
disagree with one's
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view
is better and I
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agree
,
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because
this
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allows
one the opportunity to
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make
a more concrete decision. To put in another way, when an individual has companions that do not
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agree
with his judgement, it gives the
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friend
wider options to choose from,
consequently
, resulting in more solid conclusions
being made
on various matters.
Furthermore
, this person can rely on his
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friends
with
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different
opinions
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because
even if his
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own
decision is not right, his
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friends
can bring more solid
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views
to the table that would in the
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end
solve the problems. A
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good
example of this was when a popular actor Adam
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Sadler
gave a congratulatory speech after winning the award of the best actor in the world. He attributed his success to his
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friends
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who
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kept
pushing him to the peak, despite
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having
failed to perform
excellently
in the last movie he released. If Mr
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Sadler
did not have
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friends
with
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different
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views
about his performance than what he felt about himself, he would have ended up a failure.

In conclusion
, although
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people
's viewpoints may vary, I believe that
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having
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friends
with
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different
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ideas
will yield a better result than
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friends
with the same
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ideas
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay You recently bought a new piece of equipment for your home but it did not work. You phoned the store but still, no action has been taken. Write a letter to the store manager-describe what equipment you bought-explain the problem with new equipment-say wha v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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