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You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v.1

You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 1
Public transport has so far been considered to be beneficial to the society since it’s very efficient and environmentally friendly. However, people currently have to pay a large amount of money for the mass transit system. This trend is caused by various reasons, and there will also be possible solutions to help mitigate it. There are two primary causes that lead to the increasing prices in terms of public transport. The first one is that the vast majority of residents now can afford to buy their own private car, as cars are becoming inexpensive and they provides safety for people. On the grounds of that, the number of consumers of public transport has gradually reduced, so some transportation organizations have to raise fares to maintain their profit. Another reason is that those organizations need an annual upgrade for their infrastructures. For example, by increasing the price of using trains, they can make use of the income to reconstruct some systems derailed to eliminate future train accidents. Instead of increasing the fare, there are other effective methods that can be taken. To commence with, the citizens can be persuaded to use local transit service to decrease the environmental impact. If the figure for private cars keeps rising, it will lead to the significant emission of CO2, which also contributes to the air pollution. Therefore, convincing people to use public transport will be advantageous for both transportation companies and customers. The second strategy is that local firms involving in transportation receive subsidy from other entrepreneurs to help renovate the systems. As a result, consumers will enjoy commuting the service at a standard price. In conclusion, there are some specific reasons resulting in the increase in the cost of mass transit service and several possible solutions can be carried out to solve it. Local authorities and transportation organizations should be flexible in adjusting the price to create the best experience for the customers.
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has
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so
far
been considered
to be beneficial to the society since it’s
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very
efficient and
environmentally
friendly.
However
,
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people
currently
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have to
pay a large amount of money for the mass transit system. This trend
is caused
by various reasons, and there will
also
be possible solutions to
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help
mitigate it.

There are two primary causes that lead to the increasing prices in terms of
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public
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transport
. The
first
one is that the vast majority of residents
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now
can afford to
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buy
their
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own
private car, as cars are becoming
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inexpensive and
they
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provides
safety for
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people
. On the grounds of that, the number of consumers of
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public
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transport
has
gradually
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reduced
,
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so
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some
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transportation
organizations
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have to
raise fares to maintain their profit. Another reason is that those organizations need an annual upgrade for their infrastructures.
For example
, by increasing the price of using trains, they can
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make
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use
of the income to reconstruct
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some
systems derailed to eliminate future train accidents.

Instead
of increasing the fare, there are other effective methods that can
be taken
. To commence with, the citizens can
be persuaded
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
local transit service to decrease the environmental impact. If the figure for private cars
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
rising, it will lead to the significant emission of CO2, which
also
contributes to the air pollution.
Therefore
, convincing
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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public
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transport
will be advantageous for both
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transportation
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companies
and customers. The second strategy is that local firms involving in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
receive subsidy from other entrepreneurs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
renovate the systems.
As a result
, consumers will enjoy commuting the service at a standard price.

In conclusion
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
specific reasons resulting in the increase in the cost of mass transit service and several possible solutions can
be carried
out to solve it. Local authorities and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
organizations should be flexible in adjusting the price to create the best experience for the customers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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