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The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or dis- advantages? Share personal examples in your essay. v.3

The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or dis- advantages? Share personal examples in your essay. v. 3
The Internet has revolutionized the world in many different ways. Among these, it has made it possible for people to from. Despite the many advantages that may derive from this arrangement, it is felt that working from is predominantly disadvantageous to the professional. This will be proven by looking at how the sets professionals up to be both distracted and unable to detach them- selves from. For one, although working from may be effective for many, most people are likely to get distracted under these conditions. For example, a former manager of mine once delegated a writing task to me and instructed me to complete it at. When I went to engage the project, I found it difficult to stay focused in an environment I traditionally relaxed in, and as a result the quality of my suffered. My experience clearly shows that for people like myself, working from home is disadvantageous to productivity. In addition to this, the stay-at-home worker often finds it challenging to distance themselves from their work, and this can be mentally exhausting. For instance, a colleague of mine started his own business from. Within the first few months, he was receiving telephone calls, emails and faxes at all times of the day and night. In the end, he felt forced to migrate this professional pursuit to a rented office, apartment simply because it was taking over his life. As this story illustrates, the disadvantages of a home-based job are numerous. To sum up, despite the advantages of lower overhead and independence, working from has many more drawbacks than favourable points. It is thus hoped that pro- fessionals everywhere think carefully before settling on this working arrangement.
The Internet has revolutionized the world in
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many
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different
ways. Among these, it has made it possible for
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people
to from. Despite the
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many
advantages that may derive from this arrangement, it
is felt
that
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working
from is
predominantly
disadvantageous to the professional. This will
be proven
by looking at how the sets professionals up to be both distracted and unable to detach them- selves from.

For one, although
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working
from may be effective for
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many
, most
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people
are likely to
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get
distracted under these conditions.
For example
, a former manager of mine once delegated a writing task to me and instructed me to complete it at. When I went to engage the project, I found it difficult to stay focused in an environment I
traditionally
relaxed in, and
as a result
the quality of my suffered. My experience
clearly
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shows
that for
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people
like myself,
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working
from home is disadvantageous to productivity.

In addition
to this, the stay-at-home worker
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often
finds it challenging to distance themselves from their work, and this can be mentally exhausting.
For instance
, a colleague of mine
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started
his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
business from. Within the
first
few months, he was receiving telephone calls, emails and faxes at all times of the day and night. In the
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end
, he felt forced to migrate this professional pursuit to a rented office, apartment
simply
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because
it was taking over his life. As this story illustrates, the disadvantages of a home-based job are numerous.

To sum up, despite the advantages of lower overhead and independence,
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working
from has
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many
more drawbacks than
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favourable
points. It is
thus
hoped that pro-
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fessionals
everywhere
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think
carefully
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before
settling on this
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working
arrangement.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or dis- advantages? Share personal examples in your essay. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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