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Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. with this opinion? v. 1
Ever since it became a core part of family life nearly 70 years ago, television usage has been the target of a variety of attacks. While some people have focused on the physical or mental effects, one particular popular argument is that TV is decimating our sense of family and community since it discourages communication. I strongly agree with this argument. On the one hand, there is little doubt that in moderation, TV can keep or even strengthen social connections as people can use it as a common topic to talk about. Unfortunately, televisions are rarely watched in moderation, which means its effects on social relationships are most often highly negative. Rather than spending an evening socializing or doing some other social activity, the average family watches three hours of TV. This adds up to twenty-one hours over the course of a week, which is nearly an entire day’s worth of time in front of the screens that could have been spent interacting with family members or community. It is also possible to see the detrimental effects of TV usage by comparing it to other potential alternative activities like outdoor activities or even board games. Similar to TV sets, these activities are primarily for entertainment purposes. However, both outdoor activities and board games tend to be incredibly social and are almost an antithesis to quiet TV time. Thus, not only do we spend a long time watching television on average, but it is replacing more social forms of entertainment that would be better at building relationships. Overall, I believe that the attacks on TV for damaging our social relations are justified. The average family spends an extremely large amount of time watching TV instead of participating in social activities. If we want to preserve our family and community bonds better in the future, we had better start searching for ways to reduce our television time.
Ever since it became a core part of
family
life
nearly
70 years ago,
television
usage has been the target of a variety of attacks. While
some
people
have focused on the physical or mental effects, one particular popular argument is that TV is decimating our sense of
family
and community since it discourages communication. I
strongly
agree
with this argument.

On the one hand, there is
little
doubt that in moderation, TV can
keep
or even strengthen
social
connections as
people
can
use
it as a common topic to talk about. Unfortunately,
televisions
are rarely
watched
in moderation, which means its effects on
social
relationships are most
often
highly
negative
.
Rather
than spending an evening socializing or doing
some
other
social
activity
, the average
family
watches
three hours of TV. This
adds
up to twenty-one hours over the course of a week, which is
nearly
an entire day’s worth of
time
in front of the screens that could have
been spent
interacting with
family
members or community.

It is
also
possible to
see
the detrimental effects of TV usage by comparing it to other potential alternative
activities
like outdoor
activities
or even board games. Similar to TV sets, these
activities
are
primarily
for entertainment purposes.
However
, both outdoor
activities
and board games tend to be
incredibly
social
and are almost an antithesis to quiet TV
time
.
Thus
, not
only
do we spend a long
time
watching
television
on average,
but
it is replacing more
social
forms of entertainment that would be better at building relationships.

Overall
, I believe that the attacks on TV for damaging our
social
relations
are justified
. The average
family
spends an
extremely
large amount of
time
watching TV
instead
of participating in
social
activities
. If we want to preserve our
family
and community bonds better in the future, we had better
start
searching for ways to
reduce
our
television
time
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6
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