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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society. v.4

Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society. v. 4
It is impossible to disapprove that fact to the number of science students was shrinking when compared to other discipline. This trend has been increasing and causing many problem. Upcoming paragraph will analyse some explanation for this reason. Firstly, to study a science subject requires hard work and patience. Many students around the world does not have those qualities due to this, they choose any easy stream (such as commerce and engineering) and these students are indulged in leisure. For one instance, after completing four years in science, they require to do another two years course in any specific subject to become a specialist. Science students have to devote their life for 4 to 6 years in university and they want to have that passion about that subject since it will motivate them. Secondly, getting job for science students is very difficult in this competitive world, whereas other degree students having more number of opportunity As a result, there will be a shortage in research field and this would bring more problem to our society. Science field is very important subject in the world because nowadays people not take caring their health an account of this many of them affected by various kind of disease. If the science students decreased in propositional with respect to year, then many innovative ideas which will come from mind would be disappeared and it will create more pressure on exciting practitioner. To conclude, although having many difficulties in science, it will give the best future for who worked hard. Moreover, world needs their service to acquire a healthy life.
It is impossible to disapprove that fact to the number of
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science
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students
was shrinking when compared to other discipline. This trend has been increasing and causing
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many problem
. Upcoming paragraph will
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explanation
for this reason
.

Firstly
, to study a
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science
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subject
requires
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hard
work and patience.
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Many
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students
around the
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world
does not have those qualities due to this, they choose any easy stream (such as commerce and engineering) and these
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students
are indulged
in leisure. For one instance, after completing four years in
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science
, they require to do another two years course in any specific
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subject
to become a specialist.
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Science
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students
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have to
devote their life for 4 to 6 years in
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university and
they want to have that passion about that
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subject
since it will motivate them.
Secondly
, getting job for
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science
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students
is
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difficult in this competitive
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world
, whereas other degree
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students
having more number of opportunity

As a result
, there will be a shortage in research field and this would bring more problem to our society.
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Science
field is
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very
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important
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subject
in the
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world
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nowadays
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people
not take caring their health an account of this
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many
of them
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affected
by various kind of disease. If the
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science
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students
decreased in propositional with respect to
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year
, then
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many
innovative
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ideas
which will
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come
from mind would
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and it will create more pressure on exciting practitioner.

To conclude
, although having
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difficulties in
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science
, it will give the best future for who worked
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hard
.
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,
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world
needs their service to acquire a healthy life.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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