Electronic screens are most often presented in the human life. Peoples' spare time occupying them with TV and isolate them from the outside world and healthy manner. This essay will describe a person's relationship with a machine and why I fully agree with it.
It is often argued that the television should create a big impact on the human movement and communication with others. Although I agree that digital screens plays too much important role, while neglected oven health and socialization. On the one hand, the digitalisation definitely allocate a large part of peoples life. For example, any person can live without screens, but absence of fitness will create significant problems. That's why the people should adequately think of themselves in the first place, and should not be preoccupied with a machine.
On the other hand, the television determines the overall quality of the life, since all information is an integral part of the society. Firstly, music, movies or politics can be used as an instrument for the communication and better socialization. Also, many fitness programs exist, which can motivate people to be more active and think on the own health. Moreover, if individuals can control oven occupation with television, then I disagree with these as a problem.
To conclude, that agrees that the electronic screens should allocate less our time on such urgent needs to embrace society of such behaviour can develop negative impact on their overall well-being.
Electronic
screens
are most
often
presented in the human life. Peoples' spare time occupying them with TV and isolate them from the outside world and healthy manner. This essay will
describe
a person's relationship with a machine and why I
fully
agree
with it.
It is
often
argued that the television should create a
big
impact on the human movement and communication with others. Although I
agree
that digital
screens
plays too much
important
role, while neglected oven health and socialization. On the one hand, the
digitalisation
definitely allocate a large part of peoples life.
For example
, any person can
live
without
screens
,
but
absence of fitness will create significant problems. That's why the
people
should
adequately
think
of themselves in the
first
place, and should not
be preoccupied
with a machine.
On the other hand
, the television determines the
overall
quality of the life, since all information is an integral part of the society.
Firstly
, music, movies or politics can be
used
as an instrument for the communication and better socialization.
Also
,
many
fitness programs exist, which can motivate
people
to be more active and
think
on the
own
health.
Moreover
, if individuals can control oven occupation with television, then I disagree with these as a problem.
To conclude
, that
agrees
that the electronic
screens
should allocate less our time on such urgent needs to embrace society of such
behaviour
can develop
negative
impact on their
overall
well-being.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes