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Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. v. 5
It is sometimes argued that people are being lacked the ability of interaction. While I agree with the statement about reducing the time of watching TV, it cannot deny that television can offer much more benefits. On the one hand, being addicted to television is the result of unconfidence in conversation. Firstly, the media cannot give people the chance to talk in practice since people only pay attention to watch TV and do not speak or doing other things. Therefore, the relationship in people has been destroyed. Secondly, spending much time on television instead of outdoor activities will not only lead to the break of exchange but also affect their life skills. Therefore, in some case, the drawbacks of media are much higher than the benefits. In my opinion, it also offers huge benefits for everyone. The first advantage is that it is the way to connect people with family or friends together. For example, on winter days, my family will not have to work or go out so we always decide to sit in the living room to talk about our work and life and watch television. As a result, these entertainment sources can ease to access. The second benefit is that there are varieties of programs for communicators, by attending to whatever competition or gameshow they will make acquaintance and have the chance to communicate with people even they are strange. For instance, one of my favorite program-Dad where are we going, a good program for children to experience the real life, make new friends and more confidence. Consequently, television also bring people closer, people can make it as an advantage to take a part in communities impacted by it. In conclusion, while there are some negative views about the impact of television, I do believe that the positive sides are dominated.
It is
sometimes
argued that
people
are
being lacked
the ability of interaction. While I
agree
with the statement about reducing the time of watching TV, it cannot deny that
television
can offer much more benefits.

On the one hand,
being addicted
to
television
is the result of
unconfidence
in conversation.
Firstly
, the media cannot give
people
the chance to talk in practice since
people
only
pay attention to
watch
TV and do not speak or doing other things.
Therefore
, the relationship in
people
has been
destroyed
.
Secondly
, spending much time on
television
instead
of outdoor activities will not
only
lead to the break of exchange
but
also
affect their
life
skills
.
Therefore
, in
some
case, the drawbacks of media are much higher than the benefits.

In my opinion, it
also
offers huge benefits for everyone. The
first
advantage is that it is the way to connect
people
with family or friends together.
For example
, on winter days, my family will not
have to
work or go out
so
we always decide to sit in the living room to talk about our work and life and
watch
television
.
As a result
, these entertainment sources can
ease
to access. The second benefit is that there are varieties of programs for communicators, by attending to whatever competition or
gameshow
they will
make
acquaintance and have the chance to communicate with
people
even they are strange.
For instance
, one of my favorite program-Dad where are we going, a
good
program for children to experience the real life,
make
new friends and more confidence.
Consequently
,
television
also
bring
people
closer,
people
can
make
it as an advantage to take a part in communities impacted by it.

In conclusion
, while there are
some
negative
views about the impact of
television
, I do believe that the
positive
sides
are dominated
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
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