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Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment. v.7

Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment. v. 7
It is a fact that televised shows are the most popular among different activities that entertain people. I admit that, these shows good to pick up talented people from ordinary members. Main aim of this essay is to find out how applicable are these to find out suitable one' s and to varify are they just entertainment. On the one hand, incresing number of shows are taken over the selection process of multitalented people. There is dramatic increment in the number and verity. Automatically it affect the drastic reduction of alternative selection process. Televised shows are based on career selection. Once the selected members are on stage, they concentrate on their expressive talents which others can entertain. For example; Television shows for dance programmes. Moreover, judges who placed for the placement of people are more talented in different areas. They are able to select ambitious and talented. Logical thinking can leads to the selection of suitable candidates. It is an interesting method to make famous who are meant to be. However, some types of shows are meant only to entertain people. Anchors are paid people with permanent job. They are full time or part time workers. To site an example, news programmes are conducting for a specific period of time. On the other way, payment is more compared to other programmes. To sum up, most of the stage programmes are scheduled to select talented people. But we cannot deny the fact that entertainment programmes with paid long term anchors. Creative and logical thinking of guest has a brilliant role in the candidate section. Shows act as a medium of support for the people who have difficulty to raise up. Nowadays this is considered as formal way.
It is a fact that televised
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shows
are the most popular among
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activities that entertain
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people
. I admit that, these
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shows
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good
to pick up
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talented
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people
from ordinary members. Main aim of this essay is to find out how applicable are these to find out suitable
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just
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incresing
number of
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shows
are taken
over the
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selection
process of multitalented
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people
. There is dramatic increment in the number and verity.
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it
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affect
the drastic reduction of alternative
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selection
process. Televised
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shows
are based
on career
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selection
. Once the selected members are on stage, they concentrate on their expressive talents which others can entertain.
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shows
for dance
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programmes
.

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, judges who placed for the placement of
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people
are more
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talented
in
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different
areas. They are able to select ambitious and
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talented
. Logical thinking can leads to the
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selection
of suitable candidates. It is an interesting method to
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make
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famous
who
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,
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some
types of
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shows
are meant
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only
to entertain
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people
. Anchors
are paid
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people
with permanent job. They are full time or
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part time
workers. To site an example, news
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programmes
are conducting for a specific period of time. On the other way, payment is more compared to other
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programmes
.

To sum up, most of the stage
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programmes
are scheduled
to select
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talented
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people
.
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But
we cannot deny the fact that entertainment
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programmes
with paid long term anchors.

Creative and logical thinking of guest has a brilliant role in the candidate section.
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Shows
act as a medium of support for the
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people
who have difficulty to raise up. Nowadays this
is considered
as formal way.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment. v. 7

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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