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"Telecommuting" refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. v.7

"Telecommuting" refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. v. 7
The spread of telecommuting is sure to have far-reaching effects on society. By itself, telecommuting refers to office workers spending much of their time working from home and using electronic technologies to communicate with their employers. The broader implications of telecommuting, however, may involve changes to corporate structure, workers' lifestyles and even urban planning. The most obvious changes may be apparent in the `normal' offices of companies, governments and other organisations. If even half the working week is spent telecommuting from home, then we would initially expect many empty desks in the office. As offices grow smaller, workers coming in for the day would be expected to share desks with their absent colleagues. This, in turn, may affect the social atmosphere of an organisation, however, as less social contact with one's colleagues could harm morale and loyalty. For the individual office worker, telecommuting would mean spending more time at home. For a parent with young children, this may be a blessing. Moreover, many telecommuters would be able to work the hours they wished: having a nap in the afternoon, for example, but working some hours in the evening. One substantial benefit for all telecommuting workers is that there will be no need to travel to work, allowing more free time. The structure of urban life is also likely to be affected by telecommuting. We would expect to see fewer cars on the road during peak hours and, eventually, a smaller concentration of offices in cities' central business districts. In short, people will have less reason to travel to city centres from outlying areas. As more people work and live in the same location, shops and cultural events will likely relocate themselves out of the city centre. In conclusion, telecommuting will serve not only to change the way we work but also the way we live.
The spread of telecommuting is sure to have far-reaching effects on society. By itself, telecommuting refers to
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spending much of their time working from home and using electronic technologies to communicate with their employers. The broader implications of telecommuting,
however
, may involve
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changes
to corporate structure, workers' lifestyles and even urban planning.

The most obvious
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changes
may be apparent in the `normal'
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offices
of
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companies
,
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governments
and other
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organisations
. If even half the working week
is spent
telecommuting from home, then we would
initially
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expect
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many
empty desks in the
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office
. As
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offices
grow smaller,
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workers
coming in for the day would be
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expected
to share desks with their absent colleagues. This, in turn, may affect the social atmosphere of an
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organisation
,
however
, as less social contact with one's colleagues could harm morale and loyalty.

For the individual
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office
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worker
, telecommuting would mean spending more time at home. For a parent with young children, this may be a blessing.
Moreover
,
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many
telecommuters would be able to
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work
the hours they wished: having a nap in the afternoon,
for example
,
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but
working
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some
hours in the evening. One substantial benefit for all telecommuting
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workers
is that there will be no need to travel to
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work
, allowing more free time.

The structure of urban life is
also
likely to be
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affected
by telecommuting. We would
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expect
to
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see
fewer cars on the road during peak hours and,
eventually
, a smaller concentration of
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offices
in cities' central business districts. In short,
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people
will have less reason to travel to city
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centres
from outlying areas. As more
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people
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work
and
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live
in the same location, shops and cultural
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events
will likely relocate themselves out of the city
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centre
.

In conclusion
, telecommuting will serve not
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only
to
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change
the way we
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work
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but
also
the way we
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live
.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay "Telecommuting" refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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