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Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v.6

Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v. 6
Generally, adolescence may witness many challenges at the institute and at home. The main cause behind this is their tender youth and lack of decision making capacity. Parents can provide support and guide them through this age by having timely communication. To start with, youngsters today face problems in taking the right decisions at university or at home. In other words, they don't have the experience to take right decision in life. As a result, youngsters today are confused. In addition, there are hormonal changes in their body at that early age, which is why it becomes difficult to maintain the balance between mind and body. For example, in a survey conducted at Mumbai university, out of 10000 parents 8000 parents have witnessed changes in their infant behaviour at a very young age. However, parents can try and communicate with their juvenile frequently. In other words, try to understand, what are they thinking? What is their mentality and how do they plan to address a variety of problems faced at the department. If the parents are ready to shell out some time of their busy routine, which will help them to build a good rapport with their offspring. Thus, by being open to communication can resolve most of the problem and ultimately offspring becomes approachable. In conclusion, youngsters will always face difficulty in an institute or at home, due to changes in hormones. But, it is the responsibility of parents to start communicating and discuss the difficulties and help them resolve it a appropriate way.
Generally
, adolescence may witness
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many
challenges at the institute and at home. The main cause behind this is their tender youth and lack of
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decision making
capacity.
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Parents
can provide support and guide them through this age by having timely communication.

To
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start
with, youngsters
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today
face problems in taking the right decisions at university or at home.
In other words
, they don't have the experience to take right decision in life.
As a result
, youngsters
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today
are confused
.
In addition
, there are hormonal
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changes
in their body at that early age, which is why it becomes difficult to maintain the balance between mind and body.
For example
, in a survey conducted at Mumbai university, out of 10000
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parents
8000
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parents
have witnessed
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changes
in their infant
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behaviour
at a
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very
young age.

However
,
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parents
can
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try and
communicate with their juvenile
frequently
.
In other words
, try to understand, what are they thinking? What is their mentality and how do they plan to address a variety of problems faced at the department. If the
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parents
are ready to shell out
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some
time of their busy routine, which will
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help
them to build a
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good
rapport with their offspring.
Thus
, by being open to communication can resolve most of the problem and
ultimately
offspring becomes approachable.

In conclusion
, youngsters will always face difficulty in an institute or at home, due to
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changes
in hormones.
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But
, it is the responsibility of
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parents
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
communicating and discuss the difficulties and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them resolve it
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a
appropriate way.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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