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Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v.3

Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v. 3
Teenage years are the most crucial and problematic times of our lives. While there is tremendous excitement and enthusiasm, they also go through various problems at home as well as school. In this essay, we shall discuss this topic further, and try to find a possible solution to it. There are various problems a teenager faces at school. To name a few are bullying and competition. To illustrate, some individuals have a sense of superiority in themselves, and thus always want to target the weakest amongst them and constantly harass them. Moreover, this instills fear and trepidation in younger minds and because of lack of confidence fail to stand up for themselves. Furthermore, the rising level of education standards has burdened the youth immensely, and thus staying a step ahead of everyone increases the pressure on teenagers. On the other hand, the problems stated above are carried to their houses. The constant pressure and expectations from parents towards their child leads to stress and anxiety. For example, not being able to share their issues with their parents or friends makes them more frustrated and agitated. Furthermore, many parents fail to understand the condition of the child. However, certain measures can be undertaken to resolve these problems. For instance, strict monitoring of all the students at school and colleges, as well as necessary actions taken up against ragging. Additionally, folks should spend more time with their teenage child. Understanding and guiding them would be extremely helpful in such situations. To summarize, children are considered the future generation, and so it is our responsibility that they are nurtured well and are in the right direction. Even though some may be repulsive or secluded but the joint efforts of parents as well as schools would lead them to a better future.
Teenage years are the most crucial and problematic times of our
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lives
. While there is tremendous excitement and enthusiasm, they
also
go through various
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problems
at home as
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well
as
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school
. In this essay, we shall discuss this topic
further
, and try to find a possible solution to it.

There are various
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problems
a
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teenager
faces at
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school
. To name a few are bullying and competition. To illustrate,
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some
individuals have a sense of superiority in themselves, and
thus
always want to target the weakest amongst them and
constantly
harass them.
Moreover
, this instills fear and trepidation in younger minds and
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because
of lack of confidence fail to stand up for themselves.
Furthermore
, the rising level of education standards has burdened the youth
immensely
, and
thus
staying a step ahead of everyone increases the pressure on
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teenagers
.

On the other hand
, the
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problems
stated above
are carried
to their
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houses
. The constant pressure and expectations from
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parents
towards their child leads to
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stress
and anxiety.
For example
, not being able to share their issues with their
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parents
or friends
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makes
them more frustrated and agitated.
Furthermore
,
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many
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parents
fail to understand the condition of the child.

However
, certain measures can be undertaken to resolve these
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problems
.
For instance
, strict monitoring of all the students at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
and colleges, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as necessary actions taken up against ragging.
Additionally
, folks should spend more time with their teenage child. Understanding and guiding them would be
extremely
helpful in such situations.

To summarize
, children
are considered
the future generation, and
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so
it is our responsibility that they
are nurtured
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well
and are in the right direction.
Even though
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some
may be repulsive or secluded
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but
the joint efforts of
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parents
as
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well
as
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schools
would lead them to a better future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
298 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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