Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. with this opinion? v. 4
A part of the population believes in the notion that the whole idea of experimenting on animals is very cruel and must be ostracized. Nevertheless, the remaining are of the opinion that experimenting on animals has been an impeccable tool in developing newer drugs and inventions for many decades and it should be continued. I firmly oppose experimentation on animals and think it cannot be justified in any way. To begin with, rats have always been the victims of numerous lethal experiments for centuries. There was a huge number of discoveries made using rats as subjects in the past like vaccines for deadly diseases, chemotherapeutic drugs, newer drugs etc. The rate at which they are being mercilessly exploited and killed in experiments is plummeting the population figures of various rat species. For example, white coloured albino rats belonging to one of the rare rodent species have completely gone extinct because of their overuse in the experiments done for the production of the latest drugs for brain tumours. For the sake of our own benefit, a species completely got eliminated from the planet. This enunciates the monstrosity and greed of humans. Not only rats, but various other animals like hamsters, monkeys, apes, frogs etc. , are also being used as subjects in experiments. The suffering which they go through in the process of testing drugs or undergoing procedures is unexplainable. The majority of the animals either die or get permanently debilitated by the end of the experiments. To illustrate, before trying different kinds of surgical repairs on a human brain, the majority of them are usually tested on apes or monkeys which have significant anatomical and physiological similarities to ours'. Innumerous monkeys end up as victims of unnecessary brain surgeries and eventually succumb to deaths. This demonstrates the cruelty the animals face and the pathetic situations which they go through. To conclude, it is the prime time for humans to find an alternative for the use of animals in experimentations and should frame laws for ostracizing or limiting their use. In my opinion, no matter how beneficial the invention might be, it still can't outweigh the pain or suffering which the animals go through. If the current scenario continues for a few more years, then it might lead to irreversible changes in the environment.
A part of the population believes in the notion that the whole
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of experimenting on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
cruel and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be ostracized
.
Nevertheless
, the remaining are of the opinion that experimenting on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
has been an impeccable tool in developing newer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
and inventions for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
decades and it should
be continued
. I
firmly
oppose experimentation on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it cannot
be justified
in any way.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, rats have always been the victims of numerous lethal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiments
for centuries. There was a huge number of discoveries made using rats as subjects in the past like vaccines for deadly diseases, chemotherapeutic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
, newer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
etc. The rate at which they are being
mercilessly
exploited and killed in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiments
is plummeting the population figures of various rat species.
For example
, white
Possible spelling mistake. 'coloured' is British English.
coloured
albino rats belonging to one of the rare rodent species have completely gone extinct
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their overuse in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiments
done for the production of the latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
for brain
Possible spelling mistake. 'tumours' is British English.
tumours
. For the sake of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefit, a species completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
eliminated from the planet. This enunciates the monstrosity and greed of humans.

Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
rats,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
various other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
like hamsters, monkeys, apes, frogs etc.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
are
also
being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as subjects in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiments
. The suffering which they go through in the process of testing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
or undergoing procedures is unexplainable. The majority of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
either
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
permanently
debilitated by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiments
. To illustrate,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
trying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of surgical repairs on a human brain, the majority of them are
usually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
on apes or monkeys which have significant anatomical and physiological similarities to
An apostrophe is never used to form possessive case pronouns. Did you mean: "ours"?
ours'
.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Innumerous
monkeys
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up as victims of unnecessary brain surgeries and
eventually
succumb to deaths. This demonstrates the cruelty the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
face and the pathetic situations which they go through.

To conclude
, it is the prime time for humans to find an alternative for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in
Possible spelling mistake found.
experimentations
and should frame laws for ostracizing or limiting their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. In my opinion, no matter how beneficial the invention might be, it
still
can't outweigh the pain or suffering which the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
go through. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
scenario continues for a few more years, then it might lead to irreversible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts