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It is sometimes argued that prison is the best place for criminals, while others think that there are better ways to deal with them. What is your opinion? v.3

Some people believe that prisons are the best place for keeping criminals, while others contradict this idea and insist that there are more efficient ways to reform them. In my opinion, criminals who are a potential threat to the society must be locked up whereas those with the desire to transform themselves must be allowed a chance to get involved in reformatory work. Serious offenders who have been convicted of heinous crimes undoubtedly possess the ability to harm the society so they must be confined within a jail. The criminal intentions and motivations they have cannot be detected or discouraged using peaceful means. That means there is always the possibility that they will reoffend and wreak havoc in the society if they are allowed to move out of prison. Even if they are deterred / prevented from committing crime outside prisons, they can influence young and needy minds to follow their footsteps and thus augment the crime rate. Thus, no fruitful result can be generated in the process. However, juvenile offenders and other criminals who have been jailed for comparatively minor offences must be allowed a second chance to redesign their lives. They must be granted an opportunity to correct them and be absorbed into the society. Firstly, arrangements should be made so that juvenile offenders receive vocational training and moral education which will teach them to distinguish noble from evil, and become law-abiding citizens. Secondly, adults must be involved in vocational trainings and skill development sessions that will enable them to find a means of livelihood and stay immune to criminal tendencies. In conclusion, it is not realistic to make and follow general rules for all criminals. Before determining whether a criminal should be sent to prison or not, it is important to consider the gravity of the crime committed by them. While a criminal with a dangerous record is a threat to peace and must be in a prison, the others who committed relatively milder crimes can be given an opportunity for reforming themselves.
Some
people
believe that
prisons
are the best place for keeping
criminals
, while others contradict this
idea
and insist that there are more efficient ways to reform them. In my opinion,
criminals
who
are a potential threat to the
society
must
be locked
up whereas those with the desire to transform themselves
must
be
allowed
a chance to
get
involved in reformatory work.

Serious offenders
who
have
been convicted
of heinous
crimes
undoubtedly
possess the ability to harm the
society
so
they
must
be confined
within a jail. The
criminal
intentions and motivations they have cannot
be detected
or discouraged using peaceful means. That means there is always the possibility that they will
reoffend
and wreak havoc in the
society
if they are
allowed
to
move
out of prison.

Even if they
are deterred
/
prevented
from committing
crime
outside
prisons
, they can influence young and needy minds to follow their footsteps and
thus
augment the
crime
rate.
Thus
, no fruitful result can
be generated
in the process.

However
, juvenile offenders and other
criminals
who
have
been jailed
for
comparatively
minor
offences
must
be
allowed
a second chance to redesign their
lives
. They
must
be granted
an opportunity to correct them and
be absorbed
into the
society
.
Firstly
, arrangements should
be made
so
that juvenile offenders receive vocational training and moral education which will teach them to distinguish noble from evil, and become law-abiding citizens.
Secondly
, adults
must
be involved
in vocational trainings and
skill
development sessions that will enable them to find a means of livelihood and stay immune to
criminal
tendencies.

In conclusion
, it is not realistic to
make
and follow general
rules
for all
criminals
.
Before
determining whether a
criminal
should be
sent
to
prison
or not, it is
important
to consider the gravity of the
crime
committed by them. While a
criminal
with a
dangerous
record is a threat to peace and
must
be in a
prison
, the others
who
committed
relatively
milder
crimes
can be
given
an opportunity for reforming themselves.
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IELTS essay While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, others believe that there are better ways to deal with them.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
336 words
5.5
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