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Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers To what extend do you agree or disagree v.2

Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers v. 2
It is some suggestion that more and more people nowadays become increasing used technology in education, and in the future, robots might take the place of teachers. For my personal perspective, I am against completely this matter. Central to this point is that teachers play a vital to motivate their students. This is because teachers help them involve in the materials or make them more active. For example, one has the advantage of using game in class. It is a good way for students to understand what is being taught to them because of having competition, while robots are just learning tools and they are likely to make feeling bored. As the result, teachers are able to convey their knowledge to children easier thank to successful learning experience. The other reason is that the most positive effect which related to human interactions between teacher and the participation in class. Teacher have competency in leave the legacy of relationships and self-discipline with his student. How good the teacher is will decide how well the student learn; in fact, students just learn and imitate behaviors what their teachers do, while robots lack of emotional intelligence to do that. Teachers usually teach children not only basic knowledge linked to subjects but also develop their social skills. It is consideration to be very useful to push their performance further in the future. In conclusion, although robots are play important roles of expanding student’s horizon, I strongly believe that teachers are still of greater importance in education.
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some
suggestion that more and more
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people
nowadays become increasing
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technology in education, and in the future, robots might take the place of
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teachers
. For my personal perspective, I am against completely this matter.

Central to this point is that
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teachers
play a vital to motivate their
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students
. This is
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because
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teachers
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help
them involve in the materials or
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make
them more active.
For example
, one has the advantage of using game in
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class
. It is a
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good
way for
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students
to understand what is
being taught
to them
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because
of having competition, while robots are
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just
learning
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tools and
they are likely to
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make
feeling bored. As the result,
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teachers
are able to convey their knowledge to children easier thank to successful learning experience.

The other reason is that the most
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positive
effect which related to human interactions between
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teacher
and the participation in
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class
.
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have competency in
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leave
the legacy of relationships and self-discipline with his
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student
. How
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good
the
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teacher
is will decide how well the
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student
learn; in fact,
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students
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just
learn and imitate behaviors what their
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teachers
do, while robots lack of emotional intelligence to do that.
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usually
teach children not
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only
basic knowledge linked to subjects
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but
also
develop their social
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skills
. It is consideration to be
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very
useful to push their performance
further
in the future.

In conclusion
, although robots are play
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important
roles of expanding
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student’s
horizon, I
strongly
believe that
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teachers
are
still
of greater importance in education.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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