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Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers To what extend do you agree or disagree v.1

Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers v. 1
More than any time in the history, environmental condition is depleting at an ever higher rate. Most people support that individuals are capable of a minuscule contribution to save the natural ecosystem, and only governing authorities and massive corporation units can produce an impactful change. I totally agree with this view as they can not only discourage the vehicle usage and rubbish generation. To embark with, the cogent reason why federal authorities are capable of producing a significant control on the natural ecosystem is that they can discourage the fossil based motor vehicle usage. Since governing bodies possess more resources in the form of money - which can be utilized to employ manpower and the state of art machineries - they can easily setup a well-connected public transportation system in the cities so that people can leverage the benefits of trains and buses for their daily commute. As a result, this adaptation to public transport will slant down vehicle, which runs on fossil fuels, usage, leading to safe-guard the natural ecosystem. For example, a recent survey depicted that 40% people have stopped driving to the office since the launch of Metro train in Mumbai. Thus, if a large impact is required in the form of reducing vehicles from the road, then the federal system carries more resources to setup public transportation. Furthermore, another reason why large organization can make a sizeable contribution to secure the environmental health is that they can decrease the amount of rubbish being generated in the country. Whenever some large companies such as Railways opt to impose no plastic usage policy, the production of rubbish by the people could be decreased to a large extent. To exemplify, as per a recent survey published by the Indian Railways, there has been a 60% less plastic rubbish produced in year 2018-19 after announcing no plastic usage in trains. Thus, since large co-operations are so widely spread across the country, they can contribute massively to save the ecosystem just by inculcating a few changes. To conclude, some people support that the government and large organizations can contribute more when it comes to securing the planet's ecosystem rather than any individual. I totally agree with this viewpoint as they can reduce the number of vehicles which burn fossil fuel by implementing public transportation, and slash the rubbish by simply applying eco-friendly practices such as no plastic policy.
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support that individuals are capable of a minuscule contribution to save the natural ecosystem, and
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and
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generation.

To embark with, the cogent reason why federal authorities are capable of producing a significant control on the natural ecosystem is that they can discourage the fossil based motor
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vehicle
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usage
. Since governing bodies possess more resources in the form of money
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which can
be utilized
to employ manpower and the
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easily
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setup
a well-connected
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transportation system in the cities
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that
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people
can leverage the benefits of trains and buses for their daily commute.
As a result
, this adaptation to
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public
transport will slant down
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vehicle
, which runs on fossil fuels,
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usage
, leading to safe-guard the natural ecosystem.
For example
, a recent survey depicted that 40%
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people
have
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stopped
driving to the office since the launch of Metro train in Mumbai.
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, if a
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large
impact
is required
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vehicles
from the road, then the federal system carries more resources
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to setup
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Furthermore
, another reason why
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large
organization can
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make
a sizeable contribution to secure the environmental health is that they can decrease the amount of
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rubbish
being generated
in the country. Whenever
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some
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large
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companies
such as Railways opt to impose no
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plastic
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usage
policy, the production of
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rubbish
by the
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people
could
be decreased
to a
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large
extent. To exemplify, as per a recent survey published by the Indian Railways, there has been a 60% less
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plastic
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rubbish
produced in year 2018-19 after announcing no
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plastic
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usage
in trains.
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, since
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large
co-operations are
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so
widely
spread across the country, they can contribute
massively
to save the ecosystem
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.

To conclude
,
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support that the
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government
and
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large
organizations can contribute more when it
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comes
to securing the planet's ecosystem
rather
than any individual. I
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agree
with this viewpoint as they can
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the number of
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vehicles
which burn fossil fuel by implementing
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public
transportation, and slash the
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rubbish
by
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applying eco-friendly practices such as no
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plastic
policy.
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IELTS essay Technology has been largely integrated in education and in the future robots will even take the role of teachers v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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