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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities, which are played alone. To what exteny do you agree or disagree. v.5

Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities, which are played alone. To what exteny v. 5
Every incident in a person’s life can teach him something. Some people opine that group activities can teach you more lessons than the individual activities. I believe that each aspect has its own essence and both can be a progressive learning experience and myriads of things can be learned from both types of activities. On the one hand, team games such as basketball and football can help in improving the behavioural traits such as being compassionate for others. It helps in becoming sympathetic towards others players because each player is entitled to share everything with the other player. As a result, everyone, subconsciously feels the responsibility towards each other. For example, owing to the fact that cricket is a team sport and everyone’s best performance is mandatory for a win, everyone helps each other to improve. Consequently, everyone grows together. On the other hand, individuals played games such as tennis and badminton makes a person a responsible player. This is because winning or losing both depends on an individual and no blame games could be played, and consequently, a person learns to accept himself and how to take responsibility of his performance and it’s result. For instance, Rodger Feeder’s success credits cannot be shared with anyone and the result of each of his game depends on his strategies and no one else. However, in team games such as Cricket, winning and losing depends on team's performance and not individual, hence it is easy to blame others for a loss, but this does not teach a person how to take responsibility for the loss. In conclusion, each type of sport has its own benefit such as group sports teaches how to care of your teammates and individual sports can make you a more responsible person. Therefore, each aspect has its own value and both are essential.
Every incident in a
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person’s
life can
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teach
him something.
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Some
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people
opine that group activities can
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teach
you more lessons than the
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individual
activities. I believe that each aspect has its
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own
essence and both can be a progressive learning experience and myriads of things can
be learned
from both types of activities.

On the one hand, team
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games
such as basketball and football can
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help
in improving the
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behavioural
traits such as being compassionate for others. It
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helps
in becoming sympathetic towards others
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players
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because
each
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player
is entitled
to share everything with the
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other
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player
.
As a result
,
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everyone
,
subconsciously
feels the responsibility towards each
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other
.
For example
, owing to the fact that cricket is a team
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sport
and
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everyone’s
best performance is mandatory for a win,
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everyone
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helps
each
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other
to
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improve
.
Consequently
,
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everyone
grows together.

On the
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other
hand,
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individuals
played
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games
such as tennis and badminton
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makes
a
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person
a responsible
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player
. This is
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because
winning or losing both depends on an
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individual
and no blame
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games
could
be played
, and
consequently
, a
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person
learns to accept himself and how to take responsibility of his performance and it’s result.
For instance
, Rodger Feeder’s success credits cannot
be shared
with anyone and the result of each of his game depends on his strategies and no one else.
However
, in team
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games
such as Cricket, winning and losing depends on team's performance and not
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individual
,
hence
it is easy to blame others for a loss,
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but
this does not
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teach
a
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person
how to take responsibility for the loss.

In conclusion
, each type of
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sport
has its
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own
benefit such as group
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sports
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teaches
how to care of your teammates and
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individual
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sports
can
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make
you a more responsible
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person
.
Therefore
, each aspect has its
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own
value and both are essential.
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IELTS essay Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities, which are played alone. To what exteny v. 5

Essay
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4 paragraphs
305 words
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Overall Band Score
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