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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. with this statement? v. 2
Group activities are considered to be more potent when it comes to teaching life skills rather than individual activities. In my opinion, I almost agree with the weightage given to team activities, however solo activities can not be neglected. To commence with, being in a group, with diversed background of people, person can definitely learn numerous life skills, such as, communication, co-operation, co-ordination, team-work, conflict management, and many more. Communication is one of the most important skills in each and every aspect of life, whether it is at home or be it at a work-place, society, or with even friends. Without communication there is no any transfer of ideas, thoughts, knowledge, and viewpoints. Co-ordination is another major ability, which is essential in today's competitive world to survive and grow, acquired through team activities. Conflict management is also crucial to learn so as to handle any unwanted or uninvited situation gracefully and diplomatically. However, team is comprises of individuals only and so having individual capability and skills to strengthen the team itself can not be overlooked. It is the single-person activities only, which teach about the concentration, focus, perseverence, and sense of competitiveness. Though human is a social animal and with all the skills if there is no any sharing with other people then it can be meaningless. It is the group activities which allows the person to embrace the victory with joy and pride, and accept the defeat with grace and humbleness. This in turn develops sportsman-spirit into the person, one of the significant skills into the life. Furthermore, being a teammate, person can acquire the skill of listening to others and understanding their perspectives as well as he/she can learn how to put forward own opinion and to get heard into the group by others. To conclude, to keep a pace with today's ongoing world, into the career along with family, friends and relatives, collegues and managers, substantial skills are learnt through team activities. Yet alone played activities hold their specific place and that too required to be absorbed to have a balanced flourished life as a whole.
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agree
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activities
,
however
solo
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activities
can not
be neglected
. To commence with, being in a
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group
, with
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diversed
background of
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people
,
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person
can definitely learn numerous
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life
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skills
, such as, communication, co-operation, co-ordination, team-work, conflict management, and
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many
more. Communication is one of the most
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important
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skills
in each and every aspect of
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life
, whether it is at home or be it at a work-place, society, or with even friends. Without communication there is
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no
any transfer of
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ideas
, thoughts, knowledge, and viewpoints. Co-ordination is another major ability, which is essential in
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today
's competitive world to survive and grow, acquired through
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team
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activities
. Conflict management is
also
crucial to learn
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handle any unwanted or uninvited situation
gracefully
and
diplomatically
.
However
,
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team
is
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comprises of
individuals
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and
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so
having individual capability and
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skills
to strengthen the
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itself can not
be overlooked
. It is the single-person
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activities
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only
, which teach about the concentration, focus,
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perseverence
, and sense of competitiveness. Though human is a social animal and with all the
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skills
if there is
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no
any sharing with other
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people
then it can be meaningless. It is the
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group
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activities
which
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allows
the
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person
to embrace the victory with joy and pride, and accept the defeat with grace and humbleness. This in turn develops sportsman-spirit into the
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person
, one of the significant
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skills
into the
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life
.
Furthermore
, being a teammate,
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person
can acquire the
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skill
of listening to others and understanding their perspectives
as well
as he/she can learn how to put forward
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own
opinion and to
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get
heard into the
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group
by others.
To conclude
, to
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keep
a pace with
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today
's ongoing world, into the career along with family, friends and relatives,
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collegues
and managers, substantial
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skills
are
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learnt
through
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team
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activities
.
Yet
alone played
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activities
hold their specific place and that too required to
be absorbed
to have a balanced flourished
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life
as a whole.
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IELTS essay Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone.

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