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Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.6

Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 6
Many healthcare specialists advise people to exercise caution and be more aware of their health aspects. It is also suggested that a major share of the health budget should be diverted towards health education and preventative steps. I completely agree with this viewpoint. Firstly, I feel that channeling healthcare budget extensively towards pre-emptive health measures will reduce overall medical costs. It will also indirectly contribute to the country’s economic growth. The spending on medicines, lab tests, doctor’s fees, and surgeries is huge. In fact, it surges exponentially if the disease goes undetected and worsens at a later stage. Much of the clinical expenditure can be easily obviated if more money is spent on preventative steps. This can enable every individual to be educated about health. More health campaigns can encourage people to take simple steps of hygiene such as avoiding contaminated needles and refraining from unwanted physical contacts. Due to this, many dreadful diseases such as AIDS, Hepatitis, and Tuberculosis can be prevented. This, in turn, can save exorbitant expenses at a later stage. Secondly, incentivizing health programs can motivate people to support the government in eradicating preventable diseases. For example, a street play or a free seminar can be arranged to enlighten the public about the ill effects of smoking, chewing tobacco, alcoholism, and ignoring health check-ups. Lastly, the precautionary approach towards health will ultimately lead to a better quality of life. Healthy citizens will engender more happiness and wealth in the nation. In a developing country, many patients will be relieved of the extravagant medical costs and their productivity will increase. In conclusion, I feel both the individual and the country can save huge amounts of money by diverting a major chunk of the health budget towards measures to prevent diseases. It can also provide additional perks to health professionals. Overall, it will raise the bar in terms of adopting a healthy and prosperous living.
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Many
healthcare specialists advise
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to exercise caution and be more aware of their
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health
aspects. It is
also
suggested that a major share of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
budget should
be diverted
towards
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health
education and preventative steps. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this viewpoint.

Firstly
, I feel that channeling healthcare budget
extensively
towards
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pre-emptive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
measures will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
overall
medical costs. It will
also
indirectly
contribute to the country’s economic growth. The spending on medicines, lab
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tests
, doctor’s fees, and surgeries is huge. In fact, it surges
exponentially
if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
goes undetected and worsens at a later stage. Much of the clinical expenditure can be
easily
obviated if more money
is spent
on preventative steps. This can enable every individual to
be educated
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
. More
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
campaigns can encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to take simple steps of hygiene such as avoiding contaminated needles and refraining from unwanted physical contacts. Due to this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
dreadful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
such as AIDS, Hepatitis, and Tuberculosis can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
. This, in turn, can save exorbitant expenses at a later stage.

Secondly
, incentivizing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
programs can motivate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to support the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in eradicating preventable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
.
For example
, a street play or a free seminar can
be arranged
to enlighten the public about the ill effects of smoking, chewing tobacco, alcoholism, and ignoring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
-ups.

Lastly
, the precautionary approach towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
will
ultimately
lead to a better quality of life. Healthy citizens will engender more happiness and wealth in the nation. In a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing country
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
patients will
be relieved
of the extravagant medical costs and their productivity will increase.

In conclusion
, I feel both the individual and the country can save huge amounts of money by diverting a major chunk of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
budget towards measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
. It can
also
provide additional perks to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
professionals.
Overall
, it will raise the bar in terms of adopting a healthy and prosperous living.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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