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Write about the following topic. In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. v.3

In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v. 3
There is no doubt that these days employees are trying to look for opportunities in various companies. However, the question: Is it better to stay in one company during your working or to search for others with more benefits? Is being a controvarsial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both view points. On one side there are people who argue that in past working was less stressful and the lifestyle was more simple. As a result people were enjoying their work in one company without shiftting to another one. There are several benefits for staying in one company for instance: feeling stable, having good relationships with colleagues and improving skills in the same field of work. However, change is a must nowadays and people can not live with the same mentality as the past becasue of the inflation and the luxury that we need. A lot of workers lost their jobs suddenly becasue of the bankruptcy while I guess employees should feel this if they are working at the same place for more than five years. In these case workers are related to hteir companies and they do not want to think even that such thing might happen. One good illustration here is the governmental work in Kuwait. Workers are feeling happy becasue they have short working hours and they get used to hteir work for years and that is why they refuse to switch their careers. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact people must think of changing their workplace each 8 years because this will allow them to gain more experience and skills and this is what happens nowadays. Furthermore, stability is in relation with feeling safe at work and having good friends so as long as workers change their companies and maintain the healthy environment aat work, they will be able to produce more. In contrast, sometimes it is a black point in the employees profile to keep changing workplaces, while in my opinion restoring one's mental health and changing places is better than being stressful and not beneficial in a certain place. A good example here is the new Kuwaiti generation who refuse to be stuck to the usual local companies and they look hard to work in the private sector in order to develop their skills and personality. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to this question, however, I tend to believe workers should change their workplace whenever it is required and they have to look for their interests in varios companies.
There is no doubt that these days employees are trying to look for opportunities in various
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companies
.
However
, the question: Is it better to stay in one
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company
during your
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working
or to search for others with more benefits? Is being a
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controvarsial
issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both view points.

On one side there are
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people
who argue that in past
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working
was less stressful and the lifestyle was more simple.
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a result
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people
were enjoying their
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work
in one
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company
without
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shiftting
to another one. There are several benefits for staying in one
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company
for instance
: feeling stable, having
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good
relationships with colleagues and improving
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skills
in the same field of
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work
.
However
,
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change
is a
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must
nowadays and
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people
can not
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live
with the same mentality as the past
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becasue
of the inflation and the luxury that we need.
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A lot of
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workers
lost their jobs
suddenly
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becasue
of the bankruptcy while I guess employees should feel this if they are
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working
at the same place for more than five years. In these case
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workers
are related
to
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hteir
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companies and
they do not want to
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think
even that such thing might happen. One
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good
illustration here is the governmental
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work
in Kuwait.
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Workers
are feeling happy
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becasue
they have short
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working
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hours and
they
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to
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hteir
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for years and
that is
why they refuse to switch their careers.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact
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people
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must
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think
of changing their workplace each 8 years
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because
this will
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allow
them to gain more experience and
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skills
and this is what happens nowadays.
Furthermore
, stability is in relation with feeling safe at
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work
and having
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good
friends
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so
as long as
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workers
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change
their
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companies
and maintain the healthy environment
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aat
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work
, they will be able to produce more.
In contrast
,
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sometimes
it is a black point in the employees profile to
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keep
changing workplaces, while in my opinion restoring one's mental health and changing places is better than being stressful and not beneficial in a certain place. A
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good
example here is the new Kuwaiti generation who refuse to
be stuck
to the usual local
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companies and
they look
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hard
to
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work
in the private sector in order to develop their
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skills
and personality.

In conclusion
, there is no easy answer to this question,
however
, I tend to believe
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workers
should
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change
their workplace whenever it is
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required and
they
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have to
look for their interests in
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varios
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companies
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
440 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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