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People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co-worker than from those at a higher level such as teacher Teacher vs Co-worker or fellow students v.1

People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co-worker than from those at a higher level such as teacher Teacher vs Co-worker or fellow students v. 1
The improvement of the travelling industry has created a major impact on the English language, making it as the most commonly used dialect all over the globe. While, some citizens think, this situation will lead to turning English, the only communication medium worldwide. In my opinion, I believe that, speaking in single style is having its own advantages and disadvantages. However, speaking in a particular tone is needed to communicate with many regions of the world, but, it is also necessary to give importance to other languages. On the one hand, Talking in one phraseology for a long time, makes the person addicted to continue with the same speech. English, which is a highly acceptable talk all over the seven continents, helps a person to gain more opportunities, that is beneficial for their future. For example, Being fluent in sole accent helps an adult to become comfortable at social gatherings, and involvement in social activities throughout the sphere further, makes them independent, and socially acceptable in society. On the other hand, It also includes many drawbacks, that includes, high increase of using specific vocabulary, people tend to start forgetting other terminology that has been maintaining cultural heritage. For example, it is also commonly observed that, the languages which were used in previous centuries, used to be very precise and concise. These languages today, are turning adulterated, and losing its value in front of younger, and upcoming generations. These instances cause a major negative impact on our surroundings. Finally, In conclusion, I can conclude that, English talk though, taking a major place in professional industries, it should not affect cultural heritage and prestige of other languages which represent country wisdom. If, specific tongue prevails throughout the nature, it would lose its importance, and further, becomes extinct in the near future.
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, making it as the most
commonly
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used
dialect all over the globe. While,
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some
citizens
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think
, this situation will lead to turning English, the
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only
communication medium worldwide. In my opinion, I believe that, speaking in single style is having its
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own
advantages and disadvantages.
However
, speaking in a particular tone
is needed
to communicate with
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many
regions of the world,
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but
, it is
also
necessary to give importance to
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other
languages.

On the one hand, Talking in one phraseology for a long time,
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makes
the person addicted to continue with the same speech. English, which is a
highly
acceptable talk all over the seven continents,
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helps
a person to gain more opportunities,
that is
beneficial for their future.
For example
, Being fluent in sole accent
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helps
an adult to become comfortable at social gatherings, and involvement in social activities throughout the sphere
further
,
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makes
them independent, and
socially
acceptable in society.

On the
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other
hand, It
also
includes
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many
drawbacks, that includes, high increase of using specific vocabulary,
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people
tend to
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start
forgetting
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other
terminology that has been maintaining cultural heritage.
For example
, it is
also
commonly
observed that, the
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languages
which were
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used
in previous centuries,
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used
to be
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very
precise and concise. These
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languages
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, are turning adulterated, and losing its value in front of younger, and upcoming generations. These instances cause a major
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on our surroundings.

Finally
,
In conclusion
, I can conclude that, English talk though, taking a major place in professional industries, it should not affect cultural heritage and prestige of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
which represent country wisdom. If, specific tongue prevails throughout the nature, it would lose its importance, and
further
, becomes extinct in the near future.
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IELTS essay People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co-worker than from those at a higher level such as teacher Teacher vs Co-worker or fellow students v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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