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Task2- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? While choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. Please include specific reasons and examples in your explanation. v.3

Task2- While choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. Please include specific reasons and examples in your explanation. v. 3
Over time, many people are migrating from villages to nearby towns and cities to enhance the skills and knowledge. Some could get out of the place if they could not find any areas to survive. The decision of the people to come out of the village may be helpful or may not be helpful for them. To begin with, people in the countries which are still under development, wishes to migrate to the cities for their livelihood and for study purpose. Generally, when talking about developing countries the villages may not have the minimal facilities to study or lead their livelihood. In such cases, people opt for cities and leave the rural places. There might be hard times for those migrants. Firstly, as soon as people come to the cities might not get the jobs on may take much time to settle down. In this instance, people have to face a lot of tough situations, on the other hand, students who come to the cities for study purpose might not have much knowledge of technology and the way of the language they speak in the hamlets. Considering such circumstances, the students may undergo lots of struggles. Besides, struggles, if the students from rural background has the ample grasping power, then leading life in the cities is like a Cakewalk. Second, students as well as workers from rural areas might have some bad times in their past, but once they get habituated to the metropolitan culture and environment, it will be like a bed of roses. However, when they get habituated, their whole family's lifestyle will be altered. Globalisation will be increased. Finally, I conclude on a note, when people in the rural places have all the facilities and they seems to be happy. Then automatically people in the urban areas will be happy, since urban areas depend upon rural areas.
Over
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are migrating from villages to nearby towns and
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cities
to enhance the
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skills
and knowledge.
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could
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get
out of the place if they could not find any
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areas
to survive. The decision of the
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people
to
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come
out of the village may be helpful or may not be helpful for them.

To
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begin
with,
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people
in the countries which are
still
under development, wishes to migrate to the
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cities
for their livelihood and for study purpose.
Generally
, when talking about
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developing countries
the villages may not have the minimal facilities to study or lead their livelihood. In such cases,
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people
opt for
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cities
and
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leave
the
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rural
places. There
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might
be
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hard
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times
for those migrants.

Firstly
, as
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soon
as
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people
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to the
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not
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get
the jobs on may take much
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to settle down. In this instance,
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people
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have to
face
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a lot of
tough situations,
on the other hand
,
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students
who
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come
to the
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cities
for study purpose
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might
not have much knowledge of technology and the way of the language they speak in the hamlets. Considering such circumstances, the
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students
may undergo lots of struggles.
Besides
, struggles, if the
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students
from
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rural
background has the ample grasping power, then leading life in the
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cities
is like a Cakewalk.

Second,
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students
as well
as workers from
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rural
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areas
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might
have
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some
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bad
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times
in their past,
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once they
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get
habituated to the metropolitan culture and environment, it will be like a bed of roses.
However
, when they
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get
habituated, their whole family's lifestyle will
be altered
.
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Globalisation
will
be increased
.

Finally
, I conclude on a note, when
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people
in the
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rural
places have all the
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facilities and
they
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seems
to be happy. Then
automatically
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people
in the urban
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areas
will be happy, since urban
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areas
depend upon
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rural
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areas
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Task2- While choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. Please include specific reasons and examples in your explanation. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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