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Compare the types of communication used in 1962 and in1982. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

Compare the types of communication used in 1962 and in1982.
Some people believe that animals should be treated in the same way humans are and have similar rights, whereas others think that it is more important to use them as we desire for a meal and medical research. This essay will discuss both points of view. With regard to the exploitation of animals, people believe it is acceptable for several reasons. Firstly, they think that humans are the most important beings on the planet, and everything must be done to ensure human survival. If this means experimenting on animals so that we can fight and find cures for diseases, then this takes priority over animal suffering. Furthermore, it is believed by some animals that do not feel pain or loss as humans do, so if we have to kill animals for foodstuff or other uses, then this is morally acceptable. However, I do not believe these arguments stand up to scrutiny. The first reason is that it has been shown on numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories via animal rights groups that animals feel as much pain as humans do, and they suffer when they are kept in cages for long periods. Not only this, a substantial amount of animal research is done for cosmetics, not to find cures for diseases, so this is unnecessary. Finally, it has also been proven that humans can get all the nutrients and vitamins that they need from green vegetables and fruit. Therefore, again, having to kill animals to feed is not an adequate argument. To sum up, although some people argue killing animals for research and food is ethical, I would argue there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that this is not the case, and, therefore, steps must be taken to improve the rights of animals.
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believe that
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animals
should
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are and have similar rights, whereas others
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think
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important
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them as we desire for a meal and medical research. This essay will discuss both points of view.

With regard to the exploitation of
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animals
,
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people
believe it is acceptable for several reasons.
Firstly
, they
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think
that
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humans
are the most
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important
beings on the planet, and everything
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must
be done
to ensure
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human
survival. If this means experimenting on
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animals
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so
that we can fight and find cures for diseases, then this takes priority over
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animal
suffering.
Furthermore
, it
is believed
by
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some
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animals
that do not feel pain or loss as
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humans
do,
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so
if we
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have to
kill
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animals
for foodstuff or other
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, then this is
morally
acceptable.

However
, I do not believe these arguments stand up to scrutiny. The
first
reason is that it has
been shown
on numerous occasions by secret filming in laboratories via
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animal
rights groups that
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animals
feel as much pain as
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humans
do, and they suffer when they are
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kept
in cages for long periods. Not
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only
this, a substantial amount of
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animal
research
is done
for cosmetics, not to find cures for diseases,
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so
this is unnecessary.
Finally
, it has
also
been proven
that
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humans
can
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get
all the nutrients and vitamins that they need from green vegetables and fruit.
Therefore
, again, having to kill
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animals
to feed is not an adequate argument.

To sum up, although
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some
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people
argue killing
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animals
for research and food is ethical, I would argue there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that this is not the case, and,
therefore
, steps
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must
be taken
to
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improve
the rights of
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animals
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Compare the types of communication used in 1962 and in1982.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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