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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. v.337

When choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. v. 337
As other alternatives are in the forefront, it is believed by many individuals that libraries should be closed forever. I am in complete agreement with this statement because there are other alternatives to learn such as electronic books and online applications, which are ubiquitously used these days, and also with these there is no need of commuting to the library, which is extremely time-saving. To start with, With the burgeoning rise of digital technology; the modes of learning took a paradigm shift. In other words, not many people are depending on library books, which are mostly obsolete, to learn lessons or for their research activities. Instead, they are leaning towards studying on electronic books, which can be concurrently read by many unlike library books which are limited to some. For instance, in 2018 Alabama state completely shut their libraries and spent that left over maintenance money on creating electronic books, which resulted in a fruitful impact in that area, as people find them as an easy source of learning. Another reason is that with the technological improvements, the need to travel to a library, which can be far from house, is now devoid. That is to say, individuals can read wide-variety of books on various online applications being at their home and in their convenient time, Consequently, this time can be used productively to learn more and seek distinct information. For example, a report published by The Guardian stated that people who were using technological modes of learning are saving 25 percent of their time, inevitably, leading to be more productive. In conclusion, closing libraries would be the better course of action as there are other convenient and efficient ways of learning, which are incredibly beneficial to people for being productive and informative.
As
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other
alternatives are in the forefront, it
is believed
by
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many
individuals that libraries should
be closed
forever. I am in complete agreement with this statement
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because
there are
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other
alternatives to learn such as electronic
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books
and online applications, which are
ubiquitously
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used
these days, and
also
with these there is no need of commuting to the library, which is
extremely
time-saving.

To
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start
with, With the burgeoning rise of digital technology; the modes of learning took a paradigm shift. In
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other
words, not
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many
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people
The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are depending
on library
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, which are
mostly
obsolete, to learn lessons or for their research activities.
Instead
, they are leaning towards studying on electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, which can be
concurrently
read by
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many
unlike library
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books
which
are limited
to
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some
.
For instance
, in 2018 Alabama state completely shut their libraries and spent that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
over maintenance money on creating electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, which resulted in a fruitful impact in that area, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
find them as an easy source of learning.

Another reason is that with the technological improvements, the need to travel to a library, which can be far from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
devoid.
That is
to say, individuals can read wide-variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
on various online applications being at their home and in their convenient time,
Consequently
, this time can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
productively
to learn more and seek distinct information.
For example
, a report published by The Guardian stated that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who were using technological modes of learning are saving 25 percent of their time,
inevitably
, leading to be more productive.

In conclusion
, closing libraries would be the better course of action as there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
convenient and efficient ways of learning, which are
incredibly
beneficial to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for being productive and informative.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay When choosing friends, people should always choose those who have different interests from their own. v. 337

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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