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Task1- College students should be allowed to keep pets in their dormitories. What's your view? Please include specific reasons and details in your explanation. v.1

Task1- College students should be allowed to keep pets in their dormitories. What's your view? Please include specific reasons and details in your explanation. v. 1
It is a well known fact that history plays a very important role in the life of humans. Some people think that history is a main subject for students, whereas others believe that science and technology subjects is very important as compared to history. I will discuss both views and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, why the history subject is beneficial for students. First and foremost point has increased the knowledge about culture. In the modern era, most of the children do not know about their history, if they have a history subject in school, they get proper knowledge about their culture and also explore their history in the other nations. A further point in favour of learning History is that it helps people avoid making the same mistakes happened in the past thanks to previous experience of their precursors. For instance, the results of policies in the past enable governments to impose appropriate schemes to increase economic growth. On the other hand, some think that science as well as technology subjects is important. In these days, most of the work is based on science and technology, if the students learn that subjects in their early age, they do not face any kind of problems in their life. Furthermore, if they learn science in their school, they get jobs very easily in their life and also do 10 hours work in 1 hour with the help of technology. For example, if students study Engineering at school, they may understand how electronic gadgets work. To conclude, in my opinion, both views are good for the child's life, whereas I think that science and technology subjects are beneficial for the life of every student in the modern era.
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important
role in the
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life
of humans.
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history
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for
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students
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and
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technology
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subjects
is
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as compared to
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history
. I will discuss both views and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.

To embark with, why the
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history
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subject
is beneficial for
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students
.
First
and foremost point has increased the knowledge about culture. In the modern era, most of the children do not know about their
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history
, if they have a
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history
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subject
in school, they
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get
proper knowledge about their culture and
also
explore their
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history
in the other nations. A
further
point in
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favour
of learning
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History
is that it
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helps
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people
avoid making the same mistakes happened in the past thanks to previous experience of their precursors.
For instance
, the results of policies in the past enable
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governments
to impose appropriate schemes to increase economic growth.

On the other hand
,
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that
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. In these days, most of the work
is based
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and
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, if the
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students
learn that
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in their early age, they do not face any kind of problems in their
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life
.
Furthermore
, if they learn
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science
in their school, they
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get
jobs
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very
easily
in their
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life
and
also
do 10 hours work in 1 hour with the
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help
of
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technology
.
For example
, if
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students
study Engineering at school, they may understand how electronic gadgets work.

To conclude
, in my opinion, both views are
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good
for the child's
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life
, whereas I
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that
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subjects
are beneficial for the
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of every
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student
in the modern era.
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IELTS essay Task1- College students should be allowed to keep pets in their dormitories. What's your view? Please include specific reasons and details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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