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People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. do you agree or disagree. v.1

People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. v. 1
Nowadays, using the computer is becoming increasingly popular. From the past till now, Education mainly depends on three subjects: reading, writing, and maths. Some people say that computer skill should be added to them. In my opinion, learning how to use the computer is beneficial, as it is an essential requirement to apply for a job. As well as, it makes the earth small village. This essay will elaborate more on the supporting ideas in my opinion. The First advantage is, it creates new job offers for the individuals. Eventually, large companies and businesses depend on using computers. Furthermore, the applicants should be good at computer skill. In fact, the last Harvard university research has concluded that 80% of the future jobs will base on the computer. For these reasons, people should master using the computer to be able to find a good job. The Second benefit is, it makes the world small village. Everyone can know lots of information about another culture. Moreover, it makes the communication easier. Although using the computer is not easy, it will become easier with the practice. For example, someone from Egypt can talk with his friend in the USA only with a single click. Therefore, computer skill has a positive impact on the world. In conclusion, there is no denying how important role the computer plays. In the past, the education is mainly based on three skills: reading, writing, and maths. Some people think that computer skill should be added to this list. From my point of view, learning how to use the computer, not only creates new job offers for individuals, but also make the world as a small village, so it will be more beneficial to add computer skill for the curriculum.
Nowadays, using the computer is becoming
increasingly
popular. From the past till
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now
, Education
mainly
depends on three subjects: reading, writing, and
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maths
.
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Some
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people
say that computer
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skill
should be
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added
to them. In my opinion, learning how to
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use
the computer is beneficial, as it is an essential requirement to apply for a
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job
.
As well
as, it
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makes
the earth
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small
village. This essay will elaborate more on the supporting
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ideas
in my opinion.

The
First
advantage is, it creates new
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job
offers for the individuals.
Eventually
, large
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companies
and businesses depend on using computers.
Furthermore
, the applicants should be
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good
at computer
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skill
. In fact, the last
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Harvard university
research has concluded that 80% of the future
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jobs
will base on the computer. For these reasons,
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people
should master using the computer to be able to find a
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good
job.

The Second benefit is, it
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makes
the world
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small
village. Everyone can know lots of information about another culture.
Moreover
, it
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makes
the communication easier. Although using the computer is not easy, it will become easier with the practice.
For example
, someone from Egypt can talk with his friend in the USA
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only
with a single click.
Therefore
, computer
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skill
has a
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positive
impact on the world.

In conclusion
, there is no denying how
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important
role the computer plays. In the past, the education is
mainly
based on three
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skills
: reading, writing, and
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maths
.
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Some
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people
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think
that computer
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skill
should be
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added
to this list. From my point of view, learning how to
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use
the computer, not
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only
creates new
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job
offers for individuals,
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but
also
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make
the world as a
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small
village,
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so
it will be more beneficial to
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add
computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
for the curriculum.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. use specific reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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