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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v.2

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v. 2
In this era of technological Revolution learning about different Technologies is important. As English being considered as the "Universal language " the English learning is compulsory as well as vital. But, the understanding of local languages is also equally important. There are people with the belief that learning of local languages is useless However, I believe, it is an absurd thought and knowing the native speech is also equally crucial. My opinion is discussed further. Firstly, Yes, it is important for everyone to learn English. In this time where most of the organisations, private Institutions, government publications use English for conversation, It is undoubtedly crucial to know English. Without the understanding of this speech, you will feel left out and you will miss well known papers and books. Most of the knowledgeable news and discoveries published in English Which you will miss. For example, if you want to read about current things happening in the world, then you have to have the knowledge of the English speech. In addition, one should also have an understanding of local languages. The history of local areas and the neighbourhood is always in local language plus, conversation around nearby area is also not in English. So, understanding of own language is also necessary. But, due to craze of foreign culture, We are missing out the importance of native language. So, the survival of local languages is necessary. That's why, we should definitely try to ensure the survival of the local language. There are multiple ways of doing this. For example. We should make the teaching of local languages compulsory in each and every school. This is one of the many ways. To conclude, it is right to consider English as a first language, but it is also necessary to add native language in the syllabus of school as a second language. Since, It is so unlikely to happen, We should definitely try to ensure the survival of local languages.
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different
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important
. As English
being considered
as the
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Universal
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language
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the English learning is compulsory
as well
as vital.
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But
, the
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understanding
of
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local
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languages
is
also
equally
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important
. There are
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people
with the belief that learning of
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local
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languages
is useless
However
, I believe, it is an absurd
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thought
and knowing the native speech is
also
equally
crucial. My opinion
is discussed
further
.

Firstly
, Yes, it is
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important
for everyone to learn English. In this
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time where
most of the
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organisations
, private Institutions,
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government
publications
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use
English for conversation, It is
undoubtedly
crucial to know English. Without the
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understanding
of this speech, you will feel
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left
out and you will miss well known papers and books. Most of the knowledgeable news and discoveries published in English Which you will miss.
For example
, if you want to read about
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current
things happening in the world, then you
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have to
have the knowledge of the English speech.

In addition
, one should
also
have an
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understanding
of
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local
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languages
. The history of
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local
areas and the
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neighbourhood
is always in
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local
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language
plus, conversation around nearby area is
also
not in English.
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So
,
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understanding
of
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language
is
also
necessary.
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But
, due to craze of foreign culture, We are missing out the importance of native
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language
.
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So
, the survival of
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local
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languages
is necessary. That's why, we should definitely try to ensure the survival of the
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local
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language
. There are multiple ways of doing this.
For example
. We should
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make
the teaching of
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local
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languages
compulsory in each and every school. This is one of the
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many
ways.

To conclude
, it is right to consider English as a
first
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language
,
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but
it is
also
necessary to
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add
native
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language
in the syllabus of school as a second
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language
. Since, It is
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so
unlikely to happen, We should definitely try to ensure the survival of
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local
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languages
.
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IELTS essay You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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