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Task 3: The woman express her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

Task 3: The woman express her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
In modern society average life of things has decreased. Now a days people would love to use the items for a shorter duration compare to the earlier. This essay will discuss the reasons why people in some countries don't like to use things for a longer period and put forward several solutions to this issue. One of the major reasons why people would love to change the things in some time is technology development in few countries. With number of resources available to people and advancement in technology encourage people to upgrade themselves. For example: average life of a cell phone has decreased from 2 years to 1 years because of revolutionary changes, which attract a lot of people and people wants to get hands on to the latest technology as soon as possible, in the mobile industry. This way number of devices not being used is getting increased which has significant impact on environmental change. For example: electronic wastage and number of vehicles on the road are two main reasons of global warming. To adhere the issue of unused items, the government has taken various steps. For example: to control the electronic wastes, the government is providing the 80% of subsidies on applying the plant to recycle the electronics waste. Similarly, the government is encouraging people to use the electric vehicles instead of using the petrol or diesel vehicles. To increase the sale of electronic vehicles, the government has reduced the 50% import duty. In conclusion, in fast developing countries more and more number of unused products are increasing. This essay discussed how often people have started replacing the products because of change in technology. This essay also discussed about the initiatives taken by the government to solve the issues because of products which are not used by anyone.
In modern society average life of things has decreased.
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Now a days
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people
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
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use
the items for a shorter duration compare to the earlier. This essay will discuss the reasons why
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people
in
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some
countries don't like to
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use
things for a longer period and put forward several solutions to this issue.

One of the major reasons why
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people
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
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change
the things in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time is
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technology
development in few countries. With
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number
of resources available to
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people
and advancement in
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technology
encourage
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people
to upgrade themselves.
For example
: average life of a cell phone has decreased from 2 years to 1 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of revolutionary
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changes
, which attract
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a lot of
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people
and
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
wants
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
hands on to the latest
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technology
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible, in the mobile industry. This way
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number
of devices not being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
is getting increased which has significant impact on environmental
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change
.
For example
:
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electronic
wastage and
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number
of
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vehicles
on the road are two main reasons of global warming.

To adhere the issue of unused items, the
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government
has taken various steps.
For example
: to control the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electronic
wastes, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is providing the 80% of subsidies on applying the plant to recycle the electronics waste.
Similarly
, the
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government
is encouraging
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the electric
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vehicles
instead
of using the petrol or diesel
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vehicles
. To increase the sale of
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electronic
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vehicles
, the
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government
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
the 50% import duty.

In conclusion
, in
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fast
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developing countries
more and more
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number
of unused products are increasing. This essay discussed how
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often
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people
have
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started
replacing the products
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because
of
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change
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. This essay
also
Did you mean simply "discussed the"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discussed about the
initiatives taken by the
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government
to solve the issues
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of products which are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by anyone.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 3: The woman express her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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