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Task1: Think about a place you enjoyed going to or visiting when you were a child. Describe the place. Explaining why you enjoyed it. v.1

Task1: Think about a place you enjoyed going to or visiting when you were a child. Describe the place. Explaining why you enjoyed it. v. 1
In modern society, some people believe that the main environmental problems of our time are the loss of species of plants and animals, while other people argue that there are more important environmental problems. In my opinion, I personally believe that there are more critical issues than the loss of species. On the one hand, I agree that the extinction of plants and animals is the most serious environmental issue. In fact, plants and animals are interrelated, therefore the loss of one species can lead to the loss of other species. For example, if plants died, many of the herbivores that feed off it will also die, while many carnivores will die because of the dead of herbivores. Additionally, the loss of species will reduce biodiversity. Biodiversity is important because certain species have important applications in medicine and chemical industries. On the other hand, some people consider that there are more serious environmental issues, such as water pollution, air pollution and the effect of climate changed. For example, many people have respiratory disease in China because of air pollution. Statistics indicated that more than 13 percent of people died each year because of the air pollution. Additionally, global warming is a serious environmental issue, if the earth continues to experience rising, it will start to become uninhabitable for human, especially for marines’ animals. By way of conclusion, I personally believe that there are more important environmental issues such as air pollution and global warming, although the loss of species of plants and animals is the most serious environmental issues.
In modern society,
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loss
of species.

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is the most
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certain species have
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applications in medicine and chemical industries.

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consider that there are more
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have respiratory disease in China
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. Statistics indicated that more than 13 percent of
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each year
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, if the earth continues to experience rising, it will
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to become uninhabitable for human,
especially
for marines’ animals.

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personally
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such as
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and global warming, although the
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of species of
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and
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is the most
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environmental
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Task1: Think about a place you enjoyed going to or visiting when you were a child. Describe the place. Explaining why you enjoyed it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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