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Task 1: If a friend from another country visited your home, what food would you parepare and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Task 1: If a friend from another country visited your home, what food would you parepare and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Some people insist that children should have the freedom to decide what they should eat, wear, read or watch. Others opine that if children have the freedom to make their own choices, they will grow up into selfish individuals. In my opinion, children should definitely have the freedom to make their own choices; however, parents should also teach them to respect the needs and wants of others. It is important for children to make their own choices. This way they can learn to be independent and grow up into strong willed adults who achieve success. What’s more, a child who knows what he wants is more likely to be successful than one who has no clear goals or ambitions. Needless to say, children who take small decisions right from their childhood are better at dealing with challenges and conflicts. However, there is an important downside to this. Children who make their own choices have increased chances of becoming selfish. For instance, my nephew always insists on watching his favourite programmes on television. He does not care whether the rest of the family likes those shows or not. He is only concerned about what he wants. In future, this attitude will impact his ability to work in a team. He may even fail in his relationships. In short, the lack of emotional intelligence is detrimental to the success and happiness of a child. In conclusion, although it is important for children to learn to make choices regarding their day to day life, parents must ensure that they are also learning to respect the decisions and choices of others. Only then can they grow up into free-willed adults who also possess empathy.
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achieve success. What’s more, a child
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knows what he wants is more likely to be successful than one
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decisions right from their childhood are better at dealing with challenges and conflicts.

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have increased chances of becoming selfish.
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on television. He does not care whether the rest of the family likes those
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or not. He is
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concerned about what he wants.
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, this attitude will impact his ability to work in a team. He may even fail in his relationships. In short, the lack of emotional intelligence is detrimental to the success and happiness of a child.

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, although it is
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to learn to
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regarding their
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ensure that they are
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learning to respect the decisions and
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of others.
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then can they grow up into free-willed adults
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IELTS essay Task 1: If a friend from another country visited your home, what food would you parepare and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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