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Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. v. 2
Some argue that new home in the locality should be built to match the traditional building style of that area, whereas others think that people have the right autonomy in choosing their own style. I agree with the view that occupants of a house have the freedom to decide how it should look. On the one hand, there are strong arguments that the new housing should follow a traditional style in the residency. Practically, several architectural measures are conformed to certain geographic conditions of the nation. Indeed, in Japan, where natural disasters namely earthquake or tsunami usually affect citizens, the national government have to take control of structural qualities to reduce losses of human and property if accidents occur. In term of cultural values, conventional counterparts remain the beauty of cultural identity, which becomes a tourist destination in the country and generally over the world, which reduces an unemployment rate in the local area. Take Hue province as an example, one of the most ancient cities in Viet Nam, the authorities encourage local people to preserve an antique house or construct new house in ancient style, which made Hue as one of the most renowned tourist destinations. On the other hand, there are many benefits to building a home as the needs and wants of its owner. Firstly, by being freedom to show the owner characteristics, which make their homes a distinctive comparison to surrounding others. People build their house for different purposes, which might serve their demand or express their vision and taste as well as their richness. Particularly, the elder tends to prefer bungalow to a three-storey house, or the young family usually consider a small and affordable house with a public playground for their children; meanwhile, the upper class might choose penthouse or villa. From the respective of construction cost, materials of modern homes are more reasonable than its convention due to the fact it is easily obtained and produced, like iron or steel while building conventional counterparts made from wood which is hard to find and affect to natural resources. While it is easy to follow the historical style of building homes, it is more important to allow people to have the freedom to decide to build their house as their favours.
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Some
argue that new home in the locality should
be built
to match the traditional
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building
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style
of that area, whereas others
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think
that
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people
have the right autonomy in choosing their
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own
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style
. I
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agree
with the view that occupants of a
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house
have the freedom to decide how it should look.

On the one hand, there are strong arguments that the new housing should follow a traditional
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style
in the residency.
Practically
, several architectural measures
are conformed
to certain geographic conditions of the nation.
Indeed
, in Japan, where natural disasters
namely
earthquake or tsunami
usually
affect citizens, the national
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government
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have to
take control of structural qualities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
losses of human and property if accidents occur. In term of cultural values, conventional counterparts remain the beauty of cultural identity, which becomes a tourist destination in the country and
generally
over the world, which
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reduces
an unemployment rate in the local area. Take Hue province as an example, one of the most ancient cities in
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Viet
Nam, the authorities encourage local
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people
to preserve an antique
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house
or construct new
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house
in ancient
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style
, which made Hue as one of the most renowned tourist destinations.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
benefits to
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building
a home as the needs and wants of its owner.
Firstly
, by being freedom to
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show
the owner characteristics, which
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make
their
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homes
a distinctive comparison to surrounding others.
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People
build their
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house
for
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different
purposes, which might serve their demand or express their vision and taste
as well
as their richness.
Particularly
, the elder tends to prefer bungalow to a
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three-storey
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house
, or the young family
usually
consider a
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small
and affordable
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house
with a public playground for their children; meanwhile, the upper
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class
might choose penthouse or villa. From
The phrase 'the respective of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the respective of
construction cost, materials of modern
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homes
are more reasonable than its convention due to the fact it is
easily
obtained and produced, like iron or steel while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
conventional counterparts made from wood which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to find and affect to natural resources.

While it is easy to follow the historical
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style
of
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building
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homes
, it is more
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important
to
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allow
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people
to have the freedom to decide to build their
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house
as their
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favours
.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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