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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 1
People have different views on how new houses should be built. While some argue that new homes in a locality should be built to match the traditional building style of that area, others insist that house owners should be allowed to choose whatever design they like. In my opinion, the occupants of a house should have the freedom to decide how it should look. There are definitely a few benefits to following the traditional style. It lends a classic look to the neighbourhood. Also, when all houses look the same, residents feel a sense of equality. People often build palatial homes to show off their wealth. By simply asking them to build a home that matches other homes in the locality the government can stop this audacious display of wealth. On the flip side, there are many more benefits to building a home as per the needs and wants of its owner. To start with, homes that look alike lack character. A home is a reflection of the owner’s personality. It is a space you own and for this reason, the local authorities should allow people to decide how their homes should be built. Also, traditional buildings are not very energy efficient or comfortable. Many of them also lack modern features such as attached bathrooms or modular kitchens. In addition, adding features such as CCTV cameras or burglar alarms to a traditionally built home can be a challenge. To conclude, while it is easy to follow the historical style of building homes, in my opinion, it is important to allow people to decide how their homes should be built because a home is much more than a place to live in. It is an extension of your personality.
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. While
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argue that new
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in a locality should
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to match the traditional
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building
style of that area, others insist that
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owners should be
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allowed
to choose whatever design they like. In my opinion, the occupants of a
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house
should have the freedom to decide how it should look.

There are definitely a few benefits to following the traditional style. It lends a classic look to the
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, when all
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houses
look the same, residents feel a sense of equality.
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often
build palatial
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homes
to
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show
off their wealth. By
simply
asking them to build a home that matches other
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homes
in the locality the
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government
can
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stop
this audacious display of wealth.

On the flip side, there are
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more benefits to
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building
a home as per the needs and wants of its owner. To
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with,
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that look alike lack character. A home is a reflection of the owner’s personality. It is a space you
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own
and
for this reason
, the local authorities should
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allow
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people
to decide how their
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be built
.
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, traditional
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are not
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energy efficient or comfortable.
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of them
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lack modern features such as attached bathrooms or modular kitchens.
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, adding features such as CCTV cameras or burglar alarms to a
traditionally
built home can be a challenge.

To conclude
, while it is easy to follow the historical style of
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building
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homes
, in my opinion, it is
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important
to
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allow
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people
to decide how their
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should
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because
a home is much more than a place to
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live
in. It is an extension of your personality.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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