Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that the newly built houses should follow the styles of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that the newly built houses should follow the styles of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 2
It has become a noticeable controversy when people arguing towards the selection of new houses’ architectural styles in the locality where traditional houses are existing. At the outset, it is widely believed by many that all new residential houses must obey exactly the way old houses were constructed to maintain cultural heritage. However, I am of the opinion that new house’s owners should be encouraged to freely design their own houses because of enhancement of houses’ performances during operation. On the one hand, the idea of forcing new houses’ builders to obey long-establish houses’ appearances is believed by many because the cultural values of local areas that have been represented in house construction. Firstly, if the new houses, that are designed with bright-color facades, appear in the middle of conventional structures, the whole beauty of house arrangement will be destroyed. Consequently, it is hard to find out the original cultural value in the areas. As an illustration, because the “Hoi An” town, a well-known and cultural tourism place in Vietnam, has been fulfilled with modern houses, its reputation for cultural unique has been vanished. However, I am in favour of the idea that landlords ought to be free to build their houses because of significant benefits from material development that enhances house’s efficiency. It is obvious that advanced materials being applied nowadays in modern houses are more durable and sustainable compared those in the old houses. As a result, it may not only diminish the maintenance cost and energy consumption, but it may also lengthen the service life of houses. For example, more durable and environment friendly roof tiles should be used to replace the heavy concrete tiles to reduce 50% of energy consumed in the summer and increase lifetime by 50 years. In conclusion, maintaining the old-established house styles is the conservative idea of some in order to preserve heritage. Nevertheless, my stance is that it is better to promote new house styles as a consequence of material production progress.
It has become a noticeable controversy when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
arguing towards the selection of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses’
architectural styles in the locality where traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
are existing. At the outset, it is
widely
believed by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
that all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
residential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
obey exactly the way
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
were constructed
to maintain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
heritage.
However
, I am of the opinion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house’s
owners should
be encouraged
to
freely
design their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of enhancement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses’
performances during operation.

On the one hand, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of forcing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses’
builders to obey long-establish
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses’
appearances
is believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
values of local areas that have
been represented
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
construction.
Firstly
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
, that
are designed
with bright-color facades, appear in the middle of conventional structures, the whole beauty of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
arrangement will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
.
Consequently
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to find out the original
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
value in the areas. As an illustration,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the “
Possible spelling mistake found.
Hoi
An” town, a well-known and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
tourism place in Vietnam, has
been fulfilled
with modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
, its reputation for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
unique has
been vanished
.

However
, I am in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that landlords ought to be free to build their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of significant benefits from material development that enhances
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house’s
efficiency. It is obvious that advanced materials
being applied
nowadays in modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
are more durable and sustainable compared those in the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
.
As a result
, it may not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
diminish the maintenance cost and energy consumption,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it may
also
lengthen the service life of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
.
For example
, more durable and environment friendly roof tiles should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to replace the heavy concrete tiles to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
50% of energy consumed in the summer and increase lifetime by 50 years.

In conclusion
, maintaining the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
-established
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
styles is the conservative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
in order to preserve heritage.
Nevertheless
, my stance is that it is better to promote
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
styles as a consequence of material production progress.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Do you know what a foreign accent is? It’s a sign of bravery.
Amy Chua

IELTS essay Some people think that the newly built houses should follow the styles of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts