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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 2
It is argued that the architectural style of new buildings should be the same as that of old buildings in local areas, while others believe that people should be free to design their own house the way they prefer. I personally agree with the second group. On the one hand, the primary reason why some people think that modern constructions should follow the style of the old ones in local areas is that this helps preserve traditional and cultural values, which could boost tourism in these areas. Take Hoi An, which is one of the most famous ancient cities in Vietnam, as an example. Local people in this city are encouraged to preserve their old houses or construct new houses in traditional architectural styles. As a result, Hoi An has become a popular tourist destination that attracts millions of tourists on an annual basis. On the other hand, I would argue that people should have the right to make their own decisions when it comes to building their own house. The first reason is that many people do not like the style of old buildings in their neighbourhood. Their rights would be violated if they were forced to live in a house that they do not feel comfortable about the design. Another reason that needs to be mentioned is cost. It would be much cheaper to build a modern simple house rather than one which has to mirror past architectural standards. In conclusion, although some people say that the design and construction of modern and traditional buildings should be the same, I personally believe that the owners should be allowed to decide the way their own house will be built.
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that the architectural
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buildings
should be the same as that of
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old
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buildings
in local areas, while others believe that
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people
should be free to design their
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the way they prefer. I
personally
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agree
with the second group.

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people
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think
that modern constructions should follow the
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style
of the
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old
ones in local areas is that this
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helps
preserve traditional and cultural values, which could boost tourism in these areas. Take
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which is one of the most
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famous
ancient cities in Vietnam, as an example. Local
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people
in this city
are encouraged
to preserve their
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old
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houses
or construct new
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houses
in traditional architectural
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styles
.
As a result
,
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has become a popular tourist destination that attracts millions of tourists on an annual basis.

On the other hand
, I would argue that
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people
should have the right to
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make
their
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decisions when it
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building
their
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house
. The
first
reason is that
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many
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people
do not like the
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style
of
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old
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buildings
in their
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neighbourhood
. Their rights would
be violated
if they
were forced
to
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live
in a
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house
that they do not feel comfortable about the design. Another reason that needs to
be mentioned
is cost
. It would be much cheaper to build a modern simple
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house
rather
than one which
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has to
mirror past architectural standards.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
say that the design and construction of modern and traditional
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buildings
should be the same, I
personally
believe that the owners should be
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allowed
to decide the way their
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own
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will
be built
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
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