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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v.6

People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6
No wonder that technological advances in transportation have made it easier for food commodities to travel around the globe. However, such blooming trend in trading nourishments are probably responsible for the drop in local food consumption because people tend to have more preference for the exotic one. This essay will illustrate both stands of the phenomenon before the ultimate conclusion is reached. To begin with, it is obvious that amenities to transport help food miles shorten than ever before, which benefits local consumers greatly from various food and victual choices. To illustrate, people living in cold climate countries where land do not favor growing all sorts of fruits and vegetables throughout the year can try tropical fruits and delicatessen from other regions. Moreover, as multi-national giants coming raises higher competitiveness with local food producers, to be served on the dining table, local products must be leveled up tasty, ingredients, packaging and many other qualities and lowered their prices. Accordingly, such globalized food trend has resulted in people having the ability to enjoy foods to that they did not previously have access at really reasonable prices. However, there are some downsides to the trend that should be taken into consideration. As mentioned above, international food companies with their advanced manufacturing technologies and clever advertising strategies make them far more efficient than local ones. As a result, the lack of competitiveness is synonymous with potential closure to local producers, vanishing local traditional products, and impairing cultural cuisine in the long run. In addition, imported food is not likely to be fresh and safe to our health given that preservatives and other harmful substances are commonly used in food processing to transport in a long distance between areas or countries. In conclusion, it is apparent that the food produced in other regions is gaining popularity albeit several minuses concerning its fresh and local cuisine impact. However, I strongly believe that this is a positive trend due to the diversified diet and domestic food quality enhancement.
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food
commodities to travel around the globe.
However
, such blooming
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trend
in trading
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nourishments
are
probably
responsible for the drop in
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local
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food
consumption
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because
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people
tend to have more preference for the exotic one. This essay will illustrate both stands of the phenomenon
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before
the ultimate conclusion
is reached
.

To
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begin
with, it is obvious that amenities to transport
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help
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food
miles shorten than ever
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before
, which benefits
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local
consumers
greatly
from various
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food
and victual choices. To illustrate,
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people
living in
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cold
climate countries where land do not favor growing all sorts of fruits and vegetables throughout the year can try tropical fruits and delicatessen from
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other
regions.

Moreover
, as multi-national giants coming raises higher competitiveness with
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local
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food
producers, to
be served
on the dining table,
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local
products
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must
be leveled
up tasty, ingredients, packaging and
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many
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other
qualities and lowered their prices.
Accordingly
, such globalized
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food
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trend
has resulted in
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people
having the ability to enjoy
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foods
to that they did not previously have access at
really
reasonable prices.

However
, there are
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some
downsides to the
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trend
that should
be taken
into consideration. As mentioned above, international
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food
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companies
with their advanced manufacturing technologies and clever advertising strategies
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make
them far more efficient than
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local
ones.
As a result
, the lack of competitiveness is synonymous with potential closure to
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local
producers, vanishing
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local
traditional products, and impairing cultural cuisine in the long run.
In addition
, imported
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food
is not likely to be fresh and safe to our health
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given
that preservatives and
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other
harmful substances are
commonly
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used
in
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food
processing to transport in a long distance between areas or countries.

In conclusion
, it is apparent that the
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food
produced in
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other
regions is gaining popularity albeit several minuses concerning its fresh and
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local
cuisine impact.
However
, I
strongly
believe that this is a
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positive
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trend
due to the diversified diet and domestic
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food
quality enhancement.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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