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Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. v. 1
Since ancient times, schools have been considered as the temple of knowledge. Therefore, it is often argued by many people that much of the learning should happen in the school and the students should not be burdened with home assignments. However, there are many others who disagree with this view; they think that homework is a crucial part of their child’s overall education. In my opinion, young students should not be given any homework because they need time to play once they reach home. However, older students should be given homework because they have to revise their lessons every day to achieve good grades. On the one hand, many parents feel that homework is an extra burden that has been put on their child’s shoulder. In their opinion, children should be taught everything in school so that they can play or rest when they reach home. If students have no homework to complete, they can focus more on some sports which they could take up as a hobby or even as a career option. Or they can just play around with other kids and spend time with their families which would contribute to their overall personality development. On the other hand, certain parents think that homework plays a vital role in the academics of their children. According to them, homework serves as a revision of the class work which helps the child to understand the topic better. It also gives them an additional practice of the lesson taught to them in the school. This, in fact, reduces the exam stress considerably as the student has practiced the lessons multiple times. To sum up, it is said that too much of anything is bad; hence there should be a balance maintained in terms of homework given to a student. Schools should come up with a timetable which could allow students to focus more on studies in school so that they can focus on other activities after school.
Since ancient times,
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schools
have
been considered
as the temple of knowledge.
Therefore
, it is
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often
argued by
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many
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people
that much of the learning should happen in the
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school
and the
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students
should not
be burdened
with home assignments.
However
, there are
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many
others who disagree with this view; they
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think
that
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homework
is a crucial part of their child’s
overall
education. In my opinion, young
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students
should not be
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given
any
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homework
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because
they need time to
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play
once they reach home.
However
, older
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students
should be
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given
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homework
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because
they
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have to
revise their lessons every day to achieve
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good
grades.

On the one hand,
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many
parents feel that
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homework
is an extra burden that has
been put
on their child’s shoulder. In their opinion, children should
be taught
everything in
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school
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so
that they can
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play
or rest when they reach home. If
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students
have no
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homework
to complete, they can focus more on
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some
sports which they could take up as a hobby or even as a career option. Or they can
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just
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play
around with
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other
kids and spend time with their families which would contribute to their
overall
personality development.

On the
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other
hand, certain parents
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think
that
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homework
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plays
a vital role in the academics of their children. According to them,
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homework
serves as a revision of the
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class
work which
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helps
the child to understand the topic better. It
also
gives them an additional practice of the lesson taught to them in the
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school
. This, in fact,
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reduces
the exam
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stress
considerably
as the
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student
has practiced the lessons multiple times.

To sum up, it
is said
that too much of anything is
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bad
;
hence
there should be a balance maintained in terms of
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homework
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to a
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student
.
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Schools
should
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come
up with a timetable which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
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students
to focus more on studies in
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school
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can focus on
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other
activities after
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school
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old house in the local areas, while other think that people should have freedom to build house of their own styles. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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