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Task 2 Some people think that children should start school at a very early age but others believe that should not go to school until they are older Discuss both these views and give your opinion v.2

Task 2 Some people think that children should start school at a very early age but others believe that should not go to school until they are older 2
At the present time, many families are trying to make their children study at a very early age. However, some people believe that children should start going to school at a consistent age. In my opinion, while I agree that this idea has many benefits, I reckon that several drawbacks can exist. There are many reasons why many parents believe that the sooner children are exposed to learning, the more intelligent they will be in the future. Firstly, these children are educated particularly and carefully as soon as they can study. For instance, in Vietnam, most rich families are trying to urge their children to go to English centres. In addition, not only do they teach children how to read alphabet, but they also want children to have more competences in many fields such as music, art. Secondly, if a child has many conditions to study at a very early age, they can know many essential skills and knowledge in the future. Therefore, these children are believed to be more agile than the others. On the other hand, there are arguments which contradict these above ideas. Some people indicate that children should go to school at a suitable age because they can have much time to understand meticulously their lives. Take Edison as an example, when he was a child, Edison, who was a famous inventor in America, hated going to school. As he hoped to have many opportunities to study real and useful knowledge. In conclusion, I think that children should go to school early. Albeit this idea can have some disadvantages, its advantages are completely efficient.
At the present time,
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families are trying to
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children
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study
at a
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very
early
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age
.
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,
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some
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people
believe that
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children
should
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start
going to
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school
at a consistent
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age
. In my opinion, while I
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agree
that this
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idea
has
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benefits, I reckon that several drawbacks can exist.

There are
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many
reasons why
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many
parents believe that the sooner
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children
are exposed
to learning, the more intelligent they will be in the future.
Firstly
, these
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children
are educated
particularly
and
carefully
as
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soon
as they can
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study
.
For instance
, in Vietnam, most rich families are trying to urge their
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children
to go to English
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centres
.
In addition
, not
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only
do they teach
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children
how to read alphabet,
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but
they
also
want
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children
to have more competences in
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many
fields such as music, art.
Secondly
, if a child has
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many
conditions to
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study
at a
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very
early
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age
, they can know
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many
essential
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skills
and knowledge in the future.
Therefore
, these
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children
are believed
to be more agile than the others.

On the other hand
, there are arguments which contradict these above
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ideas
.
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Some
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people
indicate that
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children
should go to
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school
at a suitable
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age
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because
they can have much time to understand
meticulously
their
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lives
. Take Edison as an example, when he was a child, Edison, who was a
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famous
inventor in America, hated going to
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school
. As he hoped to have
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many
opportunities to
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study
real and useful knowledge.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that
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children
should go to
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school
early. Albeit this
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idea
can have
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some
disadvantages, its advantages are completely efficient.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
A foreign language is like a frail, delicate muscle. If you do not use it, it weakens.
Jhumpa Lahiri

IELTS essay Task 2 Some people think that children should start school at a very early age but others believe that should not go to school until they are older 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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