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DO YOU THINK CONSUMER SHOULD AVOID OVER PACKED PRODUCTS OR IT IS RESPONSIBILITY OF PRODUCER TO AVOID EXTRA PACKAGING OF PRODUCTS? ” GIVE YOUR VIEWS OR ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLE WITH YOUR OWN EXPERIENCE. v.2

DO YOU THINK CONSUMER SHOULD AVOID OVER PACKED PRODUCTS OR IT IS RESPONSIBILITY OF PRODUCER TO AVOID EXTRA PACKAGING OF PRODUCTS? ” GIVE YOUR VIEWS OR ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLE WITH YOUR OWN EXPERIENCE. v. 2
Everything that we do today or has been doing has both the negative and positive sides to it. The packaging of a product, though looks like a small thing, as well has two sides attached to it. Whether a product is for consumption or utility, comes with a packaging large or small. The packing plays a pivotal role to make a product reach to the end consumer in the right way. The ultimate need and responsibility of packaging should be the producer because they are the one who are doing this action. The over packing has a negative impact on the environment which is much larger than it’s advantages. To begin with the environmental impact, the high use of plastic material to make a product look bigger than the actual size is detrimental to nature. Plastic’s in any form takes centuries before they degrade into the soil. If made to burn, they emit several toxic gasses which cause damage to the humans and environment alike. Having said that, I see that at times it becomes a requirement to over package a product for various reasons. The reasons being, protecting the product from getting infested with bacteria’s which can cause several diseases to humans. Also to add longer shelf life for a product or safer transportation to the end consumer channels such supermarkets or retail shops. In the end, I would like to conclude that over packing of a product should depend on the need based rather than doing so for the sake of marketing. This is where the producer should consider the impact on the environment and mankind while deciding on the packaging of a product.
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today
or has been doing has both the
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and
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sides to it. The
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packaging
of a
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product
, though looks like a
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small
thing,
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has two sides attached to it. Whether a
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product
is for consumption or utility,
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comes
with a
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packaging
large or
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small
. The packing plays a pivotal role to
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make
a
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product
reach to the
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end
consumer in the right way.

The ultimate need and responsibility of
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packaging
should be the producer
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because
they are the one who are doing this action.
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over packing has a
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negative
impact on the environment which is much larger than it’s advantages. To
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begin
with the environmental impact, the high
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use
of plastic material to
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make
a
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product
look bigger than the actual size is detrimental to nature. Plastic’s in any form takes centuries
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before
they degrade into the soil. If made to burn, they emit several toxic gasses which cause damage to the humans and environment alike.

Having said that, I
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see
that at times it becomes a requirement to over package a
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product
for various reasons. The reasons being, protecting the
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product
from getting infested with bacteria’s which can cause several diseases to humans.
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Also
to
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add
longer shelf life for a
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product
or safer transportation to the
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end
consumer channels such supermarkets or retail shops.

In the
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end
, I would like
to conclude
that over packing of a
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product
should depend on the need based
rather
than doing
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so
for the sake of marketing. This is where the producer should consider the impact on the environment and mankind while deciding on the
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packaging
of a
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product
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay DO YOU THINK CONSUMER SHOULD AVOID OVER PACKED PRODUCTS OR IT IS RESPONSIBILITY OF PRODUCER TO AVOID EXTRA PACKAGING OF PRODUCTS? ” GIVE YOUR VIEWS OR ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLE WITH YOUR OWN EXPERIENCE. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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