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Task 2: Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through Internet and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Task 2: Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through Internet and they can study just as well at home. v. 1
Capital punishment has been awarded for criminals in many countries since the time of immemorial. However, there remains some disagreement that whether this is beneficial or not. In my opinion, I strongly believe that sentenced to death can be an effective solution in order to reduce the crime rate in society. On the one hand, it is an indisputable fact that the death penalty is an affordable method to a long term imprisonment. Otherwise, taxpayers foot the bill for long term accommodation of convicts. By penalising deliquescent by execution, this problem can be eliminated. Apart from this, they would learn that any crime is a crime that punishable offence and this is wrong. For instance, a Country like the Kingdom of Saudi Arabia, where those who commit serious crimes; blasphemy, adultery, and consuming alcohol, are punished with death penalty. On the other hand, there are some people argue that instead of awarding an execution order, convicts are re- educated and re- socialised. In other word, those who enter the prison should be trained any skilled job to find out some employment after releasing from prison. Similarly, they must be undergone various counselling and rehabilitation sections and prepare them to adopt the life outside the jail. Obviously, they might experience some difficulty when they enter the real world, such as exclusion, non -acceptance from the society, therefore, this assistance would enable them to tackle this issue effectively. By way of conclusion, people have differed regarding capital punishment, I, again reaffirm that the death penalty has more benefits to society both economic and safety reasons.
Capital punishment has
been awarded
for criminals in
many
countries since the time of immemorial.
However
, there remains
some
disagreement that whether this is beneficial or not. In my opinion, I
strongly
believe that sentenced to death can be an effective solution in order to
reduce
the
crime
rate in society.

On the one hand, it is an indisputable fact that the death penalty is an affordable method to a long term imprisonment.
Otherwise
, taxpayers foot the bill for long term accommodation of convicts. By
penalising
deliquescent by execution, this problem can
be eliminated
. Apart from this, they would learn that any
crime
is a
crime
that punishable
offence
and this is
wrong
.
For instance
, a Country like the Kingdom of Saudi Arabia, where those who commit serious
crimes
; blasphemy, adultery, and consuming alcohol,
are punished
with death penalty.

On the other hand
, there are
some
people
argue that
instead
of awarding an execution order, convicts are re- educated and re-
socialised
. In other word, those who enter the prison should
be trained
any skilled job to find out
some
employment after releasing from prison.
Similarly
, they
must
be undergone various counselling and rehabilitation sections and prepare them to adopt the life outside the jail.
Obviously
, they might experience
some
difficulty when they enter the real world, such as exclusion, non -acceptance from the society,
therefore
, this assistance would enable them to tackle this issue
effectively
.

By way of conclusion,
people
have differed regarding capital punishment, I, again reaffirm that the death penalty has more benefits to society both economic and safety reasons.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 2: Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through Internet and they can study just as well at home. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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