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Task 2 People are of the opinion that children’s behavior should be controlled by their parents and teachers. Others do believe that children should be free to do as they like. Discuss both views and state your opinion v.1

Task 2 People are of the opinion that children’s behavior should be controlled by their parents and teachers. Others do believe that children should be free to do as they like. 1
Some people are of the opinion that parents and teachers be influencing the decision of their children and students while others believe that the adolescents be allowed free will. In this essay, I will discuss the impact of teacher and parental control, as well as the effect when they are not checkmated at the same time state my opinion on the two options. In one way, the right to guide the children to what is right and wrong is solely the responsibility of the tutors and guardian, for instance, supervise the wards on being obedient, carry out necessary task such as schooling and train them on culture as it applied to individual region. On the other way, leaving the progeny to wander the earth without exercising or putting in place any measure on how they fair academically, morally and culturally will put the future in jeopardy. Even though, quite a good number of them might find it difficult to decide what is good or bad when they needed a mentor, this neglect put the society is a free for all situation in the time to come as society decadence would be norms to those of the children who haven't been cautioned in any way. In my opinion, I strongly support the teacher and parental supervision of children or wards. This will avail them to have someone who they look up to and seek support from, meanwhile, learning and imbibing uprightness, to assist the community and immediate family sustain its values. The authority exercise on the children will in many ways enshrine their knowledge with the do's and dont's as well as ways to live peacefully and successfully. For instance, greetings for the elderly was us taught by our parents and ensuring any given task is carried out is ensured by our teachers. In conclusion, the influence our parents and teachers have in our lives is important to the life we live in our society while an unmanned life can give the community a burden it cannot shoulder.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that parents and
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teachers
be influencing the decision of their
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children
and students while others believe that the adolescents be
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allowed
free will. In this essay, I will discuss the impact of
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teacher
and parental control,
as well
as the effect when they are not checkmated at the same time state my opinion on the two options.

In one
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way
, the right to guide the
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children
to what is right and
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wrong
is
solely
the responsibility of the tutors and guardian,
for instance
, supervise the wards on being obedient, carry out necessary task such as schooling and train them on culture as it applied to individual region. On the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
, leaving the progeny to wander the earth without exercising or putting in place any measure on how they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
academically
,
morally
and
culturally
will put the future in jeopardy.
Even though
, quite a
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good
number of them might find it difficult to decide what is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
when they needed a mentor, this neglect put the society is a free for all situation in the time to
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come
as society decadence would be norms to those of the
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children
who haven't
been cautioned
in any way.

In my opinion, I
strongly
support the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
and parental supervision of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
or wards. This will avail them to have someone who they look up to and seek support from, meanwhile, learning and imbibing uprightness, to assist the community and immediate family sustain its values. The authority exercise on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will in
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
enshrine their knowledge with the
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do's
and
Did you mean "don't"?
dont'
s
as well
as
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ways
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
peacefully
and
successfully
.
For instance
, greetings for the elderly was us taught by our parents and ensuring any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
task
is carried
out
is ensured
by our teachers.

In conclusion
, the influence our parents and
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teachers
have in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
is
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important
to the life we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in our society while an unmanned life can give the community a burden it cannot shoulder.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2 People are of the opinion that children’s behavior should be controlled by their parents and teachers. Others do believe that children should be free to do as they like. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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