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Task 2: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v.1

Task 2: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 1
In today’s competitive world, companies are adopted so may strategies for their better profit and that’s why they adopted many advertising in different ways. Apart from that traditionally use now companies use Television, Radio and most of the common way is internet for advertising. I tend to agree that some method of advertising adopted by companies is unethical and unacceptable. In the beginning, we can say that some methods of advertising are influencing the people to buy unnecessary things. The main effect of advertising is on children. Children attract about various things which they see in advertising and they force their parents to buy for themselves. Moreover, companies hire some celebrity for advertising. Because of that, indigenous people attract towards that thing. Some of advertising influence bad habit on society while they waste their money on a bad product. In addition, some advertisings are too unethical like smoking and alcohol advertising. That type of advertising banned in some countries. This type of advertising puts a bad effect on society while people tend to buy these things without think their own health. Furthermore, consuming that unethical product may cause to physical problem. On the other hand, apart from that unacceptable thing there are so many things which are ethical. Some product advertising is necessary for people to know what they are buying. Advertising also describe the quality of things. In my perspective, we have to understand what we are consuming. Because some product is detrimental to ourselves. So in my opinion, we can only know that things because of advertising. Having said that, advertising also creates employment. To sum up, some unethical and unacceptable advertising creates a negative effect on people and kids. In my way, this type of advertising should be banned by the Government.
In
today
’s competitive world,
companies
are adopted
so
may strategies for their better profit and that’s why they adopted
many
advertising in
different
ways. Apart from that
traditionally
use
now
companies
use
Television, Radio and most of the common way is internet for advertising. I tend to
agree
that
some
method of advertising adopted by
companies
is
unethical
and unacceptable.

In the beginning, we can say that
some
methods of advertising are influencing the
people
to
buy
unnecessary things. The main effect of advertising is on children. Children attract about various things which they
see
in
advertising and
they force their parents to
buy
for themselves.
Moreover
,
companies
hire
some
celebrity for advertising.
Because
of that, indigenous
people
attract towards that thing.
Some of advertising
influence
bad
habit on society while they waste their money on a
bad
product
.
In addition
,
some
advertisings
are too
unethical
like smoking and alcohol advertising. That type of advertising banned in
some
countries. This type of advertising puts a
bad
effect on society while
people
tend to
buy
these things without
think
their
own
health.
Furthermore
, consuming that
unethical
product
may cause to physical problem.

On the other hand
, apart from that unacceptable thing there are
so
many
things which are ethical.
Some
product
advertising is necessary for
people
to know what they are buying. Advertising
also
describe
the quality of things. In my perspective, we
have to
understand what we are consuming.
Because
some
product
is detrimental to ourselves.
So
in my opinion, we can
only
know that things
because
of advertising. Having said that, advertising
also
creates employment.

To sum up,
some
unethical
and unacceptable advertising creates a
negative
effect on
people
and kids. In my way, this type of advertising should
be banned
by the
Government
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Task 2: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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