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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. v.27

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 27
In general, job fulfilment is known to be paramount as adults spend most of their lives working. There are different determinants of job satisfaction which results into happy living, such as basic human needs. Though the presumptions of workers for job enjoyment vary, it is not hundred percent logical. So, how do basic human needs affect employees' contentment? Although an average person would never stay idle, it is mandatory that a job would be a source that meets all requirements for human survival. These needs range from physiological, safety, self-esteem and self-actualization needs. If all these conditions are met, then every worker tends to have a fulfilled life. For instance, many researches have shown that majority of the happiest employees around the world are those that do not lack any essential demand and motivation. Since job satisfaction and the expectations of humans vary from time to time, it is impossible for workers to be satisfied. It is a known fact that humans are considered to be insatiable, thus a sense of well-being can not be guaranteed for employed middle-aged people. For example, an employee that is able to cater for feeding; shelter; safety and social amenities, would still probably want to attain a high social status by being a decision maker in his place of work. His inability to take part in decision in decision making can result into job dissatisfaction. In conclusion, some factors like physiological needs, safety and self-actualization needs are influential aspects for job satisfaction. However, it is quite unrealistic for staff to be completely satisfied with their jobs because is the nature of human beings to be unsatisfiable.
In general
,
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job
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fulfilment
is known
to be paramount as adults spend most of their
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lives
working. There are
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different
determinants of
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job
satisfaction which results into happy living, such as basic
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human
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needs
. Though the presumptions of workers for
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job
enjoyment vary, it is not
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hundred
percent logical.

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So
, how do basic
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human
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needs
affect employees' contentment? Although an average person would never stay idle, it is mandatory that a
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job
would be a source that meets all requirements for
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human
survival. These
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needs
range from physiological, safety, self-esteem and self-actualization
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needs
. If all these conditions
are met
, then every worker tends to have a fulfilled life.
For instance
,
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many
researches have shown that majority of the happiest employees around the world are those that do not lack any essential demand and motivation.

Since
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job
satisfaction and the expectations of
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humans
vary from time to time, it is impossible for workers to
be satisfied
. It is a known fact that
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humans
are considered
to be insatiable,
thus
a sense of well-being can not
be guaranteed
for employed middle-aged
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people
.
For example
, an employee
that is
able to cater for feeding; shelter; safety and social amenities, would
still
probably
want to attain a high social status by being a decision maker in his place of work. His inability to
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take part
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in decision in decision
making can result into
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job
dissatisfaction.

In conclusion
,
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some
factors like physiological
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needs
, safety and self-actualization
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needs
are influential aspects for
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job
satisfaction.
However
, it is quite unrealistic for staff to be completely satisfied with their
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jobs
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because
is the nature of
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human
beings to be
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unsatisfiable
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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