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Many historical sites and museums are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit this historical sites and museums? v.1

Many historical sites and museums are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit this historical sites and museums? v. 1
It is very good practice to visit new historical places and museums. This thing helps us to explore our knowledge. The museums and historical buildings always attract a large number of tourists. However, locals show little interest in them. I think, there are several reasons behind this trend and government can take a certain measures to encourage locals to visit such places. To begin with, the local people find it boring to visit these places. In other words, they are already familiar with their culture and history, so that's why, they think that, they would not get nothing by visiting the historical places. Adding to this, natives have an opinion, that they will waste their money and time by exploring new places. On the other hand, tourist have an aim of coming to a new place. They are eager to learn new things and always show interest in the museums and historical places. Because these places will help them to have a better understanding of the history and culture of the country in which they are visiting. Governments can take steps to convince local residents to attend museum and historic buildings. Firstly, the authorities can organise a cultural events and regular exhibitions at the historical places. Secondly, by offering free tickets and discount at the weekends, so that, low income and middle income families can visit, Thirdly, teachers can give assignments to students on historical places. So that, parents take their children to the historical Museums. This thing also helps them to excel in their studies. In conclusion, the historical places and museums are the heritage of every particular country. We get useful information and knowledge from them, but local people do not enjoy visiting such kind of places, whereas foreigners are always curious to learn more and more about their destination. The government can motivate locals to visit by conducting interesting programs and by offering free or subsidised entry.
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. This thing
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helps
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historical
buildings always attract
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, there are several reasons behind this trend and
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government
can take a certain measures to encourage
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locals
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visit
such places.

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. Adding to this, natives have an opinion, that they will waste their money and time by exploring
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places
.
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. They are eager to learn
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Governments
can take steps to convince
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residents to attend
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museum
and historic buildings.
Firstly
, the authorities can
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organise
a cultural
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events
and regular exhibitions at the
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historical
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places
.
Secondly
, by offering free tickets and discount at the weekends,
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so
that, low income and middle income families can
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,
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, teachers can give assignments to students on
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historical
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places
.
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that, parents take their children to the
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historical
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Museums
. This thing
also
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helps
them to excel in their studies.

In conclusion
, the
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historical
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places
and
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museums
are the heritage of every particular country. We
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get
useful information and knowledge from them,
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local
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people
do not enjoy visiting such kind of
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places
, whereas foreigners are always curious to learn more and more about their destination. The
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government
can motivate
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locals
to
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visit
by conducting interesting programs and by offering free or
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subsidised
entry.
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IELTS essay Many historical sites and museums are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit this historical sites and museums? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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